The Star Series: Sungrazers

Sungrazers

Both search for that most desired.

They get burnt in the scorching rays.

Eyes tear from the glaring enlightenment.

The hero falls into the raging sun,

He burns to useless black ashes.

Now gone are the cool sweet moments.

The endless fire from the sun now surrounds.

The heroine is thrown into the void,

She freezes to useless black crystals.

Now gone are the warm sweet moments.

The endless cold of space now surrounds.

Both are slain by that life-giving light and forsaken.

They are engulfed in burning pain.

Eyes tearless as the stars forget their dreams.

Reviews

[B]

You sure now how to make pain sweet .... there are areas of the brain that respond to pain in light .... the scene between two .... being all and being nothing but the presence of the sun

A painting .... if i find a studio ... i will start doing your work

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing this writing. I am glad you liked it. I have always thought pain was and is bittersweet.

[B]

Not a fan of it
Lol

[Marianne Rose]

I'm not sure if I'm reading of two lovers, or two heroes now gone or both. I am intrigued by two lines:
"Eyes tear from the glaring enlightenment" and "Eyes tearless as the stars forget their dreams"
I must read it from my heart to take what it speaks to me rather than try to guess at your intentions.
Both search- they fly so close to the fire of enlightenment, they cannot remain separate from that which they seek. In order to find enlightenment, or is it love?- they fall into the fire. Either the union with that which gives enlightenment kills them each, or the compelling nature of seeking the passion fire of love (without a cooling balance of the eternal waters) kills them both. They are male and female- hero and heroine- is it their arrogance or their blindness that does not allow them to see the fire will take them- one into the flame, the other into the void? It seems too simple to say that this is about the burning potential of love that lacks the right elements for balance and preservation. Sometimes love feels this way, but I sense a more spiritual lesson here. When the stars forget their dreams, it is as if a race of gods and goddesses have perished, no one, not even the stars, remembering what they were here for. This is a poem to sit with and ponder. Do you want to fill in any of the meaning for me so I know which way to go in my feelings about it? Thought-provoking, more like an epic mystery of the universe than a human love story. Great writing, intense and draws me in to understand, though perhaps better for me to be left in mystery than be scorched by too near a visit to this fiery place? Thank you!

[Diamond]

I will send you a read request to one of my latest story poems and you can get an answer for your questions in this poem. Both HL's and my work comes from the sameforce. Thank you.

[Marianne Rose]

Thanks- just friended you- but my brain is becoming mush now as I begin to drift off to sleep. Will check in whe I get up in the morning. HL said before I might be a warrior poet- haven't had the chance to look further on that topic- in the middle of writing two true stories, vastly different tones, both with metaphysical elements. Hard to balance writing, reading, reviewing with work, family, friends. Oh well, goodnight new friend.

[H.L. Cerveise]

This style of poems is a style I started while in my late teens. I call it multi-meaning free style. All your statements are some of the layers I want the reader to perceive. Sungrazers are comets that get very close to the sun and sometimes break into fragments when they are at their closest to the sun (see: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sungrazing_comet).

Now imagine two such comets in the void of space. They are very far from the sun at this time. Let us say gravity pulls them together; they heal each other. Now they are spinning around each other as the approach the sun. Their tails get longer as they get closer to the sun. Their tails entwine in this dance and as always like they did individually, they try to get as close as they can to the sun. However, they have made a grave error. Their center of gravity is between them not the center of themselves. The gravity tidal force from the sun is extreme and pulls the one comet (the hero) into its self. The second comet (the heroine) is subjected to the “sling shot effect” (see: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Gravity_assist). She reaches escape velocity in regard to the sun. Now she is on a path that takes her out into the cold endless void. The cool moments are when they are far from the sun, and the warm moments are when they are together close to the sun.

So the above is the layer that created this writing. Not the only layer as you saw there are others. Now to address your questions regarding two lines. The first, “Eyes tear from the glaring enlightenment,” when a comet approaches the sun parts of it unfreeze and turn to gases, and its tail is formed. I think it looks like a tear. The sun is harsh enlightenment to the comet, as you have seen the same goes for heroes, gods, goddess, lovers, etc. If we gaze too long at such brightness we all will tear up. Now the second line, “Eyes tearless as the stars forget their dreams.” Again, I will continue talking about the comets. The hero is now engulfed in the sun and there is no water to be found there so no tears. The heroine is thrown into deep space where everything is frozen, again no water, so she cannot cry. The last part of that line regarding the comets, they are small and insignificant to the stars so even if the stars did pay them any fleeting attention without the comets' tails to remind them they will not remember them. So neither of our comets will ever have a tail again, they will be separated by space and gravity and will never dance with their tails entwined.