The Dark

The Dark

A Poem by Holly
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Into the dark 
It pulls me under
I gasp
Still can't breathe
It makes me shudder
It's pulling me under
So dark
Still can't see
I hear the thunder
Who's there?
My ears ring
It's still pulling me under
So far down
Can't help but wonder
How much farther to go?
Am I still getting closer?
Though my senses are gone
I know that it's over
It senses my fear
I can feel  it now
I know that it's near
I'm afraid
My heart pounds
Though I try to be brave
There is nothing to do
I've accepted this curse
There is nothing to save
They say fear is worse
When it's unseen
And because it's so dark
I let out a scream

© 2014 Holly


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I think fear is something that invades our lives and leaves us unbalanced, putting us in a cage.

I would like to see you be more descriptive in your writing. It's okay to leave the main gist of the poem at the end, but without detail to get there, the reader may lose interest.

Keep writing.

Posted 6 Years Ago



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Added on March 7, 2014
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Tags: dark, under, fear, can't, see, hear, poems, scary, afraid, angst, suspense, teen, scream

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