Recess of your mind

Recess of your mind

A Poem by hcarson
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making our own history with what we choose to be at the forefront of our minds

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RECESS OF YOUR MIND

The past is the past,
 never made to last.
Just snippets can 
come with us,
so choose these 
pieces wisely.

Do we bring the bad 
times, the hard times-
the turmoil and torture,or 
relegate it to a dusty shelf
at the back of your mind,
where you never wander?

Leave it to get coated in 
new memories past, lost,
under a weighty tonne of
history-make it's existance 
a total mystery.

Well then, lets bring the good
 times, placed at the  forefront 
of your mind, on a clean, fresh 
space thats's easy to find, for
whenever you go wandering
through the recess of your mind.

For that is our history. What is in our 
heads, the things we've seen, 
stuff we've heard said.

Just take what you need, and 
put the rest to bed. Begin to 
build your history in the 
mystery of your head.

© 2016 hcarson


Author's Note

hcarson
all commemnts and criticisms welcome :)

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I like the metaphor of memories being placed on shelves. Good insight on how we perceive the world.
We should always bring the good memories up front to where we can see them. Unfortunately, with my housekeeping skills, everything is covered in dust.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

7 Years Ago

aha same as with me, hence this little piece to try to remind me of the order i should be keeping th.. read more



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I like the metaphor of memories being placed on shelves. Good insight on how we perceive the world.
We should always bring the good memories up front to where we can see them. Unfortunately, with my housekeeping skills, everything is covered in dust.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

7 Years Ago

aha same as with me, hence this little piece to try to remind me of the order i should be keeping th.. read more
This one is definitely my favorite,
I loveeeee this.
Beautiful and I adore every word in it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

wow, thank you so much luna!!! i'm really glad you like it, this was a bit of a different style for .. read more
L u n a

8 Years Ago

no problem! it was a very good poem :O
This has a daydream-like quality to it. Quite a romantic take on the life we live daily.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

i guess it is..far too many of us..me included at times..sit dwelling on the bad thats gone on rathe.. read more
Wow, its really a great job...
The first line 'The past is past', is awesome which attracts the reader to enter into the poem..
well, it is true that past always haunts for its repetition, which takes away the whole mind into distress. It had happened with me too - I was so depressed for a past that I forgot to have my lunch, forgot to complete my homework and many more dis-activities... Those were really weird, as I was unable to make my mind stable... Still now, sometimes it happens with me.
Your poem has got so many things to learn and to be inspired, loved it...
Thanks for sharing dear...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

Thank you for such a lovely review, im glad you liked it. 'Mind issues' as i think of them, are hard.. read more
Anindita Janhabee

8 Years Ago

well said miss, hahahahaha!!!!
First off it is lovely sentiment and a rather powerful message. But the presentation is somewhat whimsical and brings to mind a fantastic old book store. I love the subtle play between the two!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

Thank you, your comments much appreciated :)
I truly witness the development of your writing and thought process... the whole made with excellent message and kind of very well presented...

The first stanza of the poem took my mind...
"The past is the past
never made to last.
Just snippets can
come with us
so choose these
pieces wisely. " a very good message, very true, past is the past and it made to last but we can wisely choose some pieces of it to make our future better...

"Do we bring the bad
times, the hard times-
the turmoil and torture, or
relegate to a dusty shelf
at the back of your mind,
where you never wander? " i mean wow, these are amazing lines dear H... very nice question for the reader... i think in the first line if you change the 'we' to 'you' that will sound better....

"Leave it to get coated
in new memories past, lost,
under a weighty tonne of
history-make it's existence
a total mystery." wow!! very very good advices... im loving this poem...

"Well then, let's bring the good
times, placed at the forefront
of your mind, on a clean, fresh
space thats's easy to find , for
whenever you go wandering
through the recess of your mind".... brilliant.... i think there is a spelling error... Thats's should be that's....

"For that is our history. what is in our
heads, the things we've seen
stuff we've heard said."

"Just take what you need, and
put the rest to bed. begin to
build your history in the
mystery of your head"....

what a brilliant piece of poetry.... hats off to you mate.... full ratings.... no wonder this is your best piece of writing.....

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Inject Positivity

8 Years Ago

you have done a fabulous job.... i love reading your works so it was another pleasurable and learnin.. read more
hcarson

8 Years Ago

oh yea haha...getting carried away with my 's's' ...naughty fingers..will remove in a jiffy :) thank.. read more
Inject Positivity

8 Years Ago

haha.... i understand.... don't thank dear frnd... i love helping you anyway i can as it makes me ha.. read more
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V
Good one. I really like "for whenever you go wandering through the recess of your mind". This could well be a last line, also, because it sounds so nice. I think, I read a certain kind of development in your poem regarding your writing improvement. Many nice lines in here. It already reads like free verse, maybe it could use a slightly different visible structuring such as dividing the stanzas in a more plausible way. Another hint: Words like can and that often read too blunt and readers sort of trip over them, when the rest reads smooth and well. I'd change them, leave them out maybe. Other than that, I think this is my fav of your writings. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


V

8 Years Ago

My fingers itch to change your poem because I see so much potential in it. But it's on you, it's you.. read more
hcarson

8 Years Ago

tell me exactly what you would change and i will write it down in that manner and see what i think :.. read more
V

8 Years Ago

Ok I'm going to send you a message.

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