Darkness creeps in (triolet)

Darkness creeps in (triolet)

A Poem by hcarson
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first attempt at this form of poetry

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DARKNESS CREEPS IN (TRIOLET)

Darkness creeps in, devouring all in its way.
The moonlight fights its way through,
trying so valiently to bring light until day.
Darkness creeps in, devouring all in its way,
taking advantage, knowing its power can't stay-
the morning sun holds to much sway.
Darkness creeps in, devouring all in its way.
The moonlight fights its way through.

© 2016 hcarson



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hcarson
comments and criticisms welcome

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First of all the form, I think you have aced it, the rhyming, the construction, all has been decorated perfectly in this poem... Keeping all the rules in mind to write this poem is not easy dear frnd and you did brilliantly to maintain it...

Now about the subject, I think the last line brings hope in my mind, darkness may creep in but no matter how hard it tries, the light will shine through it... Excellent thought dear poet frnd...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

1 Year Ago

Aww thank you dhiman, i really appreciate myour comment, it is valued as always 😊



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Triolets are such an interesting format. They draw your eyes to many different meanings. It gives a poem a type of depth and I really enjoyed this!

"Darkness creeps in, devouring all in its way,
taking advantage, knowing its power can't stay-"
This is inside my head. Its almost as if you wrote my thoughts. I Love this poem!!

Posted 8 Months Ago


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this poem gives real good images, i like how you made the dark sound like it was fading

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

1 Year Ago

Thank you hi, i really appreciate your comment 😊
First of all the form, I think you have aced it, the rhyming, the construction, all has been decorated perfectly in this poem... Keeping all the rules in mind to write this poem is not easy dear frnd and you did brilliantly to maintain it...

Now about the subject, I think the last line brings hope in my mind, darkness may creep in but no matter how hard it tries, the light will shine through it... Excellent thought dear poet frnd...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

1 Year Ago

Aww thank you dhiman, i really appreciate myour comment, it is valued as always 😊
this feels like a cat stalking something... creeping in.
ready to pounce and devour.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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hcarson

1 Year Ago

Aha...could be, i have a cat so may be my sub consious got the better of me lol, thank you for your .. read more
I Love This Poem. It's Beautiful To Me, For I Have A Habit In Talking Like I'm Writing Poetry.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

1 Year Ago

thank you christina, iam glad you liked it it, your lovely comment is very much appreciated :)

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hcarson
hcarson

cardiff, barry, United Kingdom



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