the sea

the sea

A Poem by hcarson
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quick one done frome promt of the sea

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booming sounds, echoing from the sea,
the waves crash ashore.

Running in rivelets, every crevice arrested
my heart thumps in time.

white foam glistening as i shield my eyes
a harsh winter sun

the swell rushes towards me
threatening my toes

I Watch it recede - wondering 
just where the sea-life goes.

© 2016 hcarson



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Your word choices creates the perfect imagery that the reader can expect... I loved serenity your poem brought in my mind, and how descriptive your words were... "I watch it recede-wondering/ just where the sea-life goes" brings a thought provoking view in my mind... I think you were spot on with the prompt... Lovely...

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Dhiman

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

1 Year Ago

I thank you hreatly for it, iam useless when left to my own mind for prompts...i just go blank lol. .. read more



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mou
true, sea has the most deepest sound and most lovely place to heal the heart..and if its during night time when no one is there then it's a gift..so soothing and emotional..after a long long I'm at wc and at your page too..it's nice to find my friends again :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


You use your words to paint right on scenes of the shore. I'm reminded of all the times I have "played tag" with the onrushing rivulets making their way to the beach. Very nicely done.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Your word choices creates the perfect imagery that the reader can expect... I loved serenity your poem brought in my mind, and how descriptive your words were... "I watch it recede-wondering/ just where the sea-life goes" brings a thought provoking view in my mind... I think you were spot on with the prompt... Lovely...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

1 Year Ago

I thank you hreatly for it, iam useless when left to my own mind for prompts...i just go blank lol. .. read more
interesting ...where does it go when it recedes?

is it like some people who touch boundaries but then recede into themselves?
life roars like a sea...do we just touch our toes, or do we march full into it and swim at great risk...hoping to stay afloat.???

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

1 Year Ago

i tend to jump in head first and flounder..wondering what the hell i was thinking in the first place.. read more
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hi
i like it, good write,
kinda makes me want to go to the ocean

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

1 Year Ago

A friend said do a poem about the sea annd i jotted it quickly in a few minutes so didnt really take.. read more
hi

1 Year Ago

why do you need to improve it? if you the writer thinks it is fine then there is nothing wrong with .. read more
hcarson

1 Year Ago

Aha now that is very true!! I do sometimes get caught up in altering it to suit what others think it.. read more

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hcarson
hcarson

cardiff, barry, United Kingdom



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