Everybody Hates Me

This was written when my mom scolded me and was very angry with me.I just could'nt control my anger and burst in front of everybody and thats how these words came out. This was around 1 yr bck too.

 

My heart twists,

and my tears fall down...

The pain's eating me,

and I think again and again...

Oh, why am I alive?

 Why am I alive?

Everybody hates me,

and doesnt want to see me...

What have I done?

I am just a human...

Neither an angel nor a devil...

Oh! What have I done?

Everybody hates me.

 

 

Author's Note

What can I say other than to b polite...:)

Reviews

[Markymark]

Slender,

How old are you?....if you don't mind my asking. Several of your pieces have an almost adolescent feel to them. Not that your writing is adolescent....but the mood they produce feels like a young adult maybe. They resonate well with readers, but they're so real.....This piece is good writing, but I hate the feeling it gives. If that makes any sense. I love to read you though......

Markymark

[Kelley]

I loved the part........

"I am just a human...

Neither an angel nor a devil...

Oh! What have I done?

Everybody hates me."

I can relate to this, sometimes we just want to crawl in a hole and pull the dirt in on top of us.
Anyway great write!!!

Kelley

[Penny Dreadful]

i can rly relate to this

great write

xxxx

[Vaishali..^_^]

it's really sad piece...!i liked the emotions in it....!
!there are many times we feel such broken hearted....we cry a lot and want to die...!!and thats the part of our lives.....so we need to face it with strength......!!great write...^_^

[Bud]

Such a powerful piece of work. Raw emotion on the cuff. Very moving. Mixing the portrait with the words speaks volumes. Your work is soaked in realism. Readers are bound to feel this. Keep up the great work!

[Spoken]

real raw emotion, definately felt through your words. I can relate to the angst and torturing pain, from my past.

keep leting the tears turn to words dripping on the page. It's a great release!

[Rachel Knight]

This has some raw emotion in it. That's wonderful. Why not take that raw, genuine-feeling emotion and make it more unique to you? Reach really deep down and ask yourself how you can make your poetry even more intense by putting more of your own thoughts and feelings into it. Be as creative as you can!

I wish I could be more specific than that in terms of critique, but... maybe you see what I mean? Anyway, great start. Keep writing!

[just is]

Such drastic sorrow here, such emotion pouring out, you write with heart I like that

[Slender Smile/Husna Tay..]

hi mark....:)
Hmmm.....i dont know what to say but.....here is d answer to what u asked...:)
I am 24.:)