Old Snow

Inspired by a real snow patch, and one of Master Frosts poems.

 

 

*"There's a patch of old snow in a corner"
Outside the house-- north side;
Beyond-- is what's left of the wood-rick
The stack, in April-spring much lower 
Than it was in autumn- October.

 

A higher sun demarks, draws a shadow-

Define of the roofline angle;
Cold on the dark side, warm on the bright,
One side it's March, the other it's April.

 

The old-snow is saved, from warm-erase
Beneath protruding eaves-- it lays

At leisure lingering-safe, existing

In cool shadows,the lone survivor

Of a very long season;

 

But it knows it soon will leave

Knows it cannot stay.

 

 

* Robert Frost, first line of "A patch Of Old Snow"

Reviews

[Denise]

I really truly love how you take such simple and random things seen in everyday life and create beautiful works of art with your words. This is one of my favorites that you wrote and I had to reread is several times over because I enjoyed how well it rolled off the tongue. The format and punctuation works so well along with the cadence of your words. GREAT, great job!

[Carrie Manor]

What a lovely poem it makes me think of spring, as closer the new season comes. I like how you included a bit of Robert Frost's poem.

[Narnie]

I really *really* like the punctuation in this. It adds weight and a visionary addition to the focus. And the gentle sway before it all disappears with sunshine.

[Poeticadia]

The residue of the previous season is still hanging on in there... and yet nature always keeps her balance. The 'patch of snow' is the symbol that defines the poem... but with the gift of pathetic fallacy, nature's symbolic 'patch of snow' exceeds personification and speaks for itself. The poem itself comes to life. A very fine poem indeed.

Now, having pulled it to peices, i had better say more simply that i really enjoyed it!

[Judy Ponceby]

You find the beauty in the most unusual places. Well done. Thank you for sharing :)