Love

Love

A Poem by Sarissari
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Still starting, but heres what Ive been working on

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Love is silent
Always violent
Never steady
But always heavy

Together with destruction
Fed by envy
Taking its collection

Enslaved by its constraints
Bathing in its flames
So close to death
Feeling less
Never confess

Opening my heart
I fold
Its cold


So cold...

Opening my eyes
Shes mine
I'll be fine


I'll be fine...



© 2016 Sarissari



Author's Note

Sarissari
like I said, still starting, so go easy :). Reviews would help lots.

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Kind and gentle flow. Showing you put a lot of heart behind your writings a true blessing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sarissari

1 Year Ago

Thank you falcon. I did XD
This flows with emotion. Good job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sarissari

1 Year Ago

Thanks lana
Love have so many forms like life on this earth. yes you will be fine true love give you what you already have. true love is you and you will be fine

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sarissari

1 Year Ago

Thanks again Martin :)
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SKY
Its nice, such a lovely poem :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sarissari

1 Year Ago

Thank you sky.
SKY

1 Year Ago

Welcome Sarissari.
The wall we have build around our hearts leave us cold icy and alone. I love what you have so far. Please continue

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sarissari

1 Year Ago

thank you CWilder
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lua
i personally relish the stagnated structure, there is a relatable fluctuation between love as a destructive entity, but also the corresponding yearning for it that overrides the pain it brings - an internal battle with oneself, good job

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Sarissari

1 Year Ago

Thank you lua.
Very nice poem. I love the harsh cacophony of your words: it's sort of bittersweet. This poem, when read out loud, makes me feel lost. I personally don't agree with your structure, but that might just be me.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Sarissari

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the review, Luis. I wanted to try something different with my structure. The spaces and p.. read more
Luis

1 Year Ago

It's not bad, just personally not to my liking. Other than that your poem was great!
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Hello Sarissari.
To me this poem feels like an anxiety attack.
And the calm comes with the realization that your love is still with you.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Sarissari

1 Year Ago

Hello Ivy, thanks for the review. Love is so confusing sometimes just had to write about it.
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1 Year Ago

Indeed it is. You are welcome.

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Added on December 30, 2016
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