You, Me, Us

Husband and wife start a life together enjoying each other, somewhere along the way she's forgotten.

 

Our lives together used to be concrete,

but now there is something different.

We used to sit for hours and talk  about

you, me, us.

Somewhere along the way your disposition

changed on life, now what used to be you,

me, us, is only you.

 

Knowledge tells me that I'm lost and forgotten.

Your arrogance has caused so much pain,

but your too blind to see it.

I reflect on days that we used to share.

The laughter, fun ,the us is gone,eliminated

from your life.

We're only mere acquaintances.

 

Sacrifice has been apart of me for so long.

I loved you, and wanted to save us, but can't.

There is no us, only you.

I'm only an illusion in your eyes.

 

I'm spiritless, lost, uncertain, battered and

bruised from falling in the darkness,

trying to find me.

In order to find me I have to say goodbye

to you, so it can be about me.

 

 

 

Reviews

[StormCloud]

wow, sadness. Good Job. I apologize for the extra long wait. You weren't forgotten; I've just been extremely busy trying to graduate.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sooner or later when a affair is one sided. One will run away. Great story and description in the poem. I like the ending to the poem. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Dream Slave]

Powerful. People always say love is a two way street, so when one way closes off you know it's time to go. No need to let yourself be trampled over for the sake of being with someone who clearly doesn't care anymore. Seems like the you, me, us became me, me, and I.

[Ladysue]

wow, this was sad, yet full of strength..love that last stanza...great write...

[Greg Skura]

Great Write! I see relationships like this, at first we are happy to be with someone, they are the most important thing in our lives, as time goes on we get caught up in our little lives and we slowly drift apart.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I’m bad myself when it comes to grammar but as far as I can see you’ve done a great job.

[Perception Shapes Poetr..]

heartfelt; creative and emotional. a bit on the blaming side but it drove the point that two did not feel whole with and without the us...

[Literary Artist Dream]

You're not having to rhyme in any of your writings lol, it still comes out well written and tells a compelling short short story, this one of love and loss. Its told truthfully too.

good job^

-Dream

[Tony]

These circumstances happen so often in real love relationships, but I am a firm believer that it is never one sided, something happens that provokes each of them, and the only way to try and be happy again is to part ways. Sometimes this sparks a wake up call and other times it is just an end.
This is written very well.

[Jeff]

Direct and powerful poem.