Closer to Self no Reason to Grieve

 

 I have been living my alone

As if it were a lover to be shown

 

In the wake of a lonely day

My heart years for a different way.

 

This life that seems so dead

Is alive, if only in my head.

 

I breathe in the scent that is now,

And wipe the moistness from my brow.

 

If only in my dreams,

Excitement real, I live it seems.

 

And this day that feels a waste, I believe   

Brings me closer to self, no reason to grieve.

Reviews

[D. Elizabeth]

"This life that seems so dead Is alive, if only in my head."

I know what you mean. beautiful job by the way. xo - D.E.

[Hedra Helix]

Sad how we all fall into these times in our lives, where the dreams we have are more exciting than the day and the priorities of this earth become askew.
Its a universal struggle, its just best to make it as short as possible, but while there f-it take advantage
jump off of all cliffs and fly in those dreams.

a very true write, a vivid reflection of the life in that dome...

I see it!

[Imperfection]

This life that seems so dead Is alive, if only in my head.

I can identify with these feelings.

Very strong emotions here. The words have been chosen carefully so these short lines create a powerful impact.

Well written.

[Arthur Henn]

Excellent and I agree with the rest. Powerful and strong words.

In the wake of a lonely day
My heart years for a different way

I've been here many times.

The benefit of all this is that we as writers listen to our souls and write the way we do.

Take care.

Art

[Albert Freeman]

Agreed with others. It seems in self-reflection their is equal parts loneliness, acceptance, longing and a determination to persevere.

Taking a critical look at yourself is always the hardest thing to do. This must have been a more difficult poem to write than most. You did it very elegantly and honestly.

[Yira Simone]

Wow...
self reflection is always a cause for both great sadness and joy. What I liked was that you admit to feeling low, but won't subcome to defeat because this road of grieving you right where you need to be...to yourself, up close and personal, to learn and grow and continue on in a way that was once lost to you. This was a short poem but it was also powerful. Very good work Imogean.-Catrina

[Forest Green]

It seems you have expressed conflicting emotions in your poem. I'm interested to know if I am correct about that, because I sense at one point there is acceptance for the present, while at another the present is dead.

...does this day bring one closer to self? Or is that truly a dream?

Excellent work. Ambiguity is an art with poetry.

Daniel

[An owl on the moon]

Such a poignant passage of our real and imagined life, all played out in our minds no less. A bittersweet poem done so well...

[Eagle Cruagh]

Let me be the first to say; bravo ! Well done.
This writer has the talent and ability of the true
success story. She makes words come alive, she is
genius disguised as a beautiful woman.
This story like everything she writes amplifies her own
qualities and focuses attention on the positive aspects of
her ingenious abilities.
No less than 100% rating for this one.
---- Eagle Cruagh