An old Coat

An old Coat

A Poem by Inda
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How quickly life goes by.

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An old Coat

 

Lungs filled with air,

The smell of your mother’s hair

And the warmth of her chest.

New life; hope for the best.

 

Newly bought shoes,

Pencils sharpened,

Trouble adding in twos,

Still you continued,

 

continued on.

Eighteen; life is a rock song!

The future is so far away,

The future arrives the next day.

 

Dreams struggle

To keep afloat,

A burst bubble,

memories of youth kept in an old coat.

 

 

 

© 2013 Inda


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The structure is interesting as the transitions of the paragraphs reminism about the memories a coat relives.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Inda

10 Years Ago

Thank you!
I like this perspective from the coat closet. So true. I especially like the future lines--that is how it goes for sure. Nice write Inda.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Yes. Spot-on. Great work, this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Inda

11 Years Ago

Thanks for dropping by, glad you liked it! :)
Farm out

Posted 11 Years Ago


Inda

11 Years Ago

Yes, in search of new dreams perhaps? thanks for the R&R.
The truth about life and the terrible sadness of getting old and losing your dreams. I love this it's full of hidden meaning.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Inda

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review, I enjoyed writing this a lot.
Carolann Dowsett

11 Years Ago

Welcome :) I'm glad.
A very realistic view in life. Nice job! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Inda

11 Years Ago

Thanks. Glad you liked it.
well done

Posted 11 Years Ago


Inda

11 Years Ago

Thank you!

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Inda
Inda

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