"52 Card Pick Up"

"52 Card Pick Up"

A Poem by stephen dillon
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sponaneous

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placesx
powerlessx
reachx
ancientx
sadnessx
greedyx
dawnx
heartx
onlyx
daybreakx

Powerless plutonium places where dawn only gets greedy when heart/attacks the ancient instruments

that oblong shaped humanoids reach for while the sun in attempts to catch helplessness in time before sadness

destroys you and the daybreak(s) into a house of falling cards, forcing the world to play 52 card pick up

until it's time to hack the long pig up, cannibal,manamal what ever we or they are in the galactic problem of depression

sessions

 

 

© 2013 stephen dillon


Author's Note

stephen dillon
hope its good

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It's very good! I loved this line especially:

".........for while the sun in attempts to catch helplessness in time before sadness destroys you.

Actually, while typing that in I thought maybe it may read better if you just had 1 'in'.
Take out the one before 'sun'. What do you think?

Thanks for submitting this to Tovli's Ten Prose Contest!

Helena

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

are you the moderator?
Helena

11 Years Ago

Sure am
stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

collio moderaters endorsment i really need som kinda medal i have not a one but enough material for .. read more



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Good job on putting all the words into a poem. It is a great thinking exercise. I always put my free writing exercises in a three ring binder and save them for the future. Keep up the good work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Was it one of those challenges to include all the words in the list? Some nicely original images throughout this piece, pretty cool.

Posted 11 Years Ago


stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

yup i hope i win i would like some of dem der badgers
Raef C. Boylan

11 Years Ago

Haha, nice one.
Very spontaneous, loved it!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

thanx i really appreciate it
 Tasha

11 Years Ago

youre welcome
It's very good! I loved this line especially:

".........for while the sun in attempts to catch helplessness in time before sadness destroys you.

Actually, while typing that in I thought maybe it may read better if you just had 1 'in'.
Take out the one before 'sun'. What do you think?

Thanks for submitting this to Tovli's Ten Prose Contest!

Helena

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

are you the moderator?
Helena

11 Years Ago

Sure am
stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

collio moderaters endorsment i really need som kinda medal i have not a one but enough material for .. read more
reads like it was just let out of a cage
love it
thank you for sharing

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

maybe but i know these beat guys wrote it like they lived it
Holly Mason

11 Years Ago

that is great!!
write it like you live it ...love it
stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

thanx
I love this game, not really. ;) Your words shuffle yet rhyme. I thought it was sublime.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

i really liked this game it helps me develop cut up technique
stephen dillon

11 Years Ago

funny girl

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Added on February 10, 2013
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Tags: long pig, cannibal, house of cards

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stephen dillon
stephen dillon

savannah, GA



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