Melancholic Sunshine

Morning faded in,

I saw it through the window,

I think that Sun has grown

into morning sin.

Right up there, you see?

Shining light of brilliance

sifting through our lenses

making us to feel..

miserable and in need of

some foreign and new perception,

some new drug with new sensation..

But

you know that Now is only

state of time for us to be

and the time is nothing but the

reflection of you and me.

Reviews

[Taz]

Very well penned, I love the flow and rythem of this piece. Good work!

[XMorris91]

Loved it. The first few lines pulled me in immediately thank you for sharing!!

[isus]

thank you for reading :)

[Irenic]

you know that Now is only
state of time for us to be
and the time is nothing but the
reflection of you and me.

very effective and morale giving lines.

Thanks for sharing.

[isus]

thanx on reding

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

The title pulled me in, I Like it, it's fresh and new.

[isus]

danke shoen :D

[Irenic]

................................:)

[TL Boehm]

sun has grown into morning sin. that is profound.

[Aunre]

Yep, it's over. Done. Fini. Time to find some more fertile ground to plough. AA, the farmer... I like that. :)

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

very Interesting poem.

Love the last Stanza's line.

you know that Now is only

state of time for us to be

Thank you for sharing. blessings. kindred poet

[isus]

thank you for reading

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're very welcome. blessings. kindred poet

[Frontier]

Wow the title grabbed my attention because I also have written about a "sad light". I like the line "I think Sun has grown into morning sin", I would've never come up with morning sin, although I have written about a horrifying dawn. And very nice ending :) !!!

[isus]

i actually kinda like this one also, i dont really like much of my poetry

[L4rn13]

Nice flow and rythem. I like that the sun had been changed into something possibly sinful when mythology suggests it was worshipped in certain cultures. Interesting.

[isus]

thanx, glad you like it :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Wonderful imagery in this piece, isus... love "morning faded in" ..powerful! Wonderful job here

[isus]

thanx thanx :)