Through Trip (Street)

Through Trip (Street)

A Poem by isus
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probably not final version.

"
Endless fun like endless sorrow
burning in the hollow ground,
leaving Sun for us to follow
till there is no other sound.

And do you even know for sound,
do you know that you can hear it?
Have you ever seen true color?

-Try to imagine new one,
try to find just one new color.

Out of time and out of mind
I don't really wanna bother
will I live or will i die
in flash of light, in stroke of thunder.

© 2014 isus


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The picture of emotion of endlessness is now here in front of me.

love these lines:
Endless fun like endless sorrow
burning in the hollow ground,
leaving Sun for us to follow
till there is no other sound.

Thanks for sharing


Posted 7 Years Ago


isus

7 Years Ago

thanx on reding
Irenic

7 Years Ago

.....................................:)
Loved trying to imagine a new color, blows the mind. Enjoyed reading. Richie.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Will I live or will I die in flash of light in stroke of thunder. Wise writing Isus.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very interesting and imaginative! Lovely work with a good ring to the senses. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


It's hard to imagine that it isn't finished but I kind of know how that feels like lol. I love this piece, and if ever you do decide to change it, I would love to read it as well :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


An imaginative piece that appeals to all the senses...I love some of the connections made between the Sun and colours and so on...great piece :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Interesting poem. I would love some more imagery concerning these questions you're posing? What makes the speaker wonder whether they will live, or die? Why is endless fun like endless sorrow? Bridge some of these gaps with some images :) Also, on a grammatical note, "Have you ever seen true color" since "have" is past tense.

Posted 9 Years Ago


isus

9 Years Ago

yes, thank you on noticing, my grammar is bad so thanx
Think outside the box for you have not much time to live.
Well done. ^^

Posted 9 Years Ago


isus

9 Years Ago

thanx blue :)
Bluefire

9 Years Ago

No problem. ^^
Man, this is brilliant. Your poems keep getting better, and trippier!

Posted 9 Years Ago


isus

9 Years Ago

thats too kind, thank you son!
Beautiful word flow. Your diction is amazing and spoken. Well done my friend!

Posted 9 Years Ago


isus

9 Years Ago

thank you :)

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