1.618

1.618

A Poem by isus

The room full of deceptions.
And warmth of my skin slowly decay.

You could understand this only if you're made to.
Your thoughts are nothing, they're not even yours.

If you're alive it doesn't mean you're waiting for death,
and things they were teaching you they don't understand.

My sleeve is dark. 

I'm writing these words but they don't seem alive.
Truth lies in power of perception. 
And all meaning is lost when Master comes.

But you can be free to do as we tell you,
you can bring destruction to the universe.

Or you can rest in peace. Waiting for the next oblivion.

And now my brother, my share of energy,
what do you really know?
What do you want from you?

Just remember! 
The most important thing of all is

© 2016 isus



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How appropriate. I'm reading this on Fibonacci day (11/23) and your title invokes the Golden Ratio. Yes, there are patterns within patterns and it is certainly not certain that our thoughts are even ours. How many circles within circles have we passed through, round and round the circumference? It's hard to know. And perhaps the most important thing about being is just existence. An interesting piece.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isus

11 Months Ago

i can agree on those words, and i have to say that this is one really nice review, maybe best i ever.. read more
Rick Puetter

11 Months Ago

My pleasure, and my complements!



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How appropriate. I'm reading this on Fibonacci day (11/23) and your title invokes the Golden Ratio. Yes, there are patterns within patterns and it is certainly not certain that our thoughts are even ours. How many circles within circles have we passed through, round and round the circumference? It's hard to know. And perhaps the most important thing about being is just existence. An interesting piece.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isus

11 Months Ago

i can agree on those words, and i have to say that this is one really nice review, maybe best i ever.. read more
Rick Puetter

11 Months Ago

My pleasure, and my complements!
This seems like a weak attempt at being deep. And the title didn't make sense.

Posted 1 Year Ago


isus

1 Year Ago

You could understand this only if you're made to.
Your thoughts are nothing, they're not even.. read more
I got a little confused with the different sized stanza's, but after re reading it to make sense of it, I found it to be a great poem :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


isus

1 Year Ago

you really think so?
WillaDanvers

1 Year Ago

I really think so :) You are a great writer!
isus

1 Year Ago

like when you say to the dog you are good boy :D anyway, thanx :D
I really like your writing. Thanks for submitting to the Pride in Poetry contest. Since I will be judging this for the contest I will not write about it here (yet) nor rate it. Once the contest is over, I may drop by to leave a better review.

Take care and keep on writing poetry. Looking forward to reading more.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isus

1 Year Ago

thank you, glad to know it
This is very good and I am giving it 100... However... I had to disqualify it from the (poetry challenge) contest because it does not meet the criteria.
I have extended the deadline to 09/05/16 since there seems to be some confusion on the entries.

For this challenge you must follow the Format, or it will be rejected. You must create a poem using the following words.

Coral/Edge/Toes/Hard/Worry/Banjo/Willow/Car/Round/Sound
Please underline the pertinent words.

This is the challenge. I picked it up from
-Ledger Lines-A Poem by -Hailey Juliet James- She kindly gave me permission to pass the challenge along.

I took the challenge a little further and used the words consecutively. Be creative. They may be placed anywhere in the line.

You may use any style… I chose couplets.

Be sure to check out Hailey’s,(info above) and mine under -Poetry Challenge- Wolf_Lord or I have included a sample poem in the list of entries under Dark_Wolf... The sample poem cannot be voted for and is only there as an example.

Thank you for your entry and I hope you will accept the challenge.

Wolf ,'', ^@@^ ,'',



Posted 1 Year Ago


In the end, all I can really say I know is that that I don't 100% know. Our perceptions are only mere perceptions, regardless of whether they are right or wrong, fact or opinion, etc. This is a very thought provoking poem, I really enjoyed thinking about what it discusses. Keep up the great work! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


isus

1 Year Ago

yup.. thanx on reading :)
We are the sum of our perceptions and yet - I agree with you - are they ours or what we were told...

Ending with "is" - though I feel I can understand it, just seems weak.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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isus

1 Year Ago

i understand now. and i see now what you are thinking. it might be stronger all together if i ended .. read more
Chris

1 Year Ago

I get that too... sigh.
Gentle flames and let it go. Beautiful poem

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

isus

1 Year Ago

thank you
Well written and powerful use of words :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


isus

1 Year Ago

thanx Jess
Powerful. My skin was crawling while I read. "Waiting for the next oblivion" strikes me, although it'll need to sit for a while before I can say why that line is so important. This is great poetry. I could sit here reading it and journaling my response for an hour, but sadly my schoolwork (Master) calls, and finding meaning is secondary to fulfilling class requirements. Your words speak true.

Posted 1 Year Ago


isus

1 Year Ago

i'm glad you enjoy it

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