Broken Perspective

You tell her

to go to hell

but you truly have

no concept

that she is already there

in this land

of broken dreams

she allows

these broken thoughts

to mar her disfigured perspective

"perspective?" you may query 

it mar's her perspective

on love

on loyalty

and most importantly

herself

soo...

whilst you may not have lifted that blade

neverless

you were an accessory to murder

and the cause of her fall

Reviews

[Chris]

"you were and accessory to murder" - "and" or an?

You weave a story - we listen... we SHOULD listen. Its what we do - listen. So speak as real as YOU ARE a real person. We do hear you.

I read poetry aloud - 3 times through. It helps me get a sense of the flavor, author's intent, and continuity. It also helps establish the flow and tone of the words. Because its 3 times, I more readily catch typo's and wrong words that even spell check doesn't notice.

You've things to say, I'd like to listen.

[lbertygirl98]

Wow a powerful piece:) I have felt this way myself and can relate to the pain of this piece very well written:)

[silver threaded queen]

thanks!!

[That_Girl]

I like it! :)

[silver threaded queen]

Thank you!! :)

[captain]

nice, i like it.

[Sami Geiger]

this is great!

[Rev. Fr, S. D. Blankens..]

Who is this about, Jinny?

[silver threaded queen]

Nothing, it's just random word vomit....

[Rev. Fr, S. D. Blankenship DDiv., PhD., MA.]

Ok.

[Steven Cash]

Wowwww... seriously nice :0