Perfect Bird's Eye View

Perfect Bird's Eye View

A Poem by Jack...
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Things seem so much clearer now.

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Perfect Bird’s Eye View

by jack

 

The pathway long and winding

Of obstacles I’m finding

So easily I seem to overcome

 

Steep and never ending

The height I am ascending

It seems that I can almost touch the sun

 

Still I keep on going

Beneath a sky that’s glowing

Till everything beneath me I can see

 

A few more steps I travel

Soon the sights unravel

When I am at the place I long to be

 

As to the edge I’m nearing

And down below I’m peering

I find that all my dreams have now come true

 

For as I stand here gazing

The world it is amazing

Offered by this perfect bird’s eye view

 


© 2013 Jack...



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Jack...
Thank you for reading

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I love love love this rhyming scheme, Jack...you know my general disdain for rhymes xD but this is one I tolerate rather well. It always kind of reminds me of Poe (not the content here, obviously) The meter is pitch perfect...I'll take as many as you've got. The poem itself is excellent, of course ;-) but the flow really made this one for me. Great stuff, my friend.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jack...

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much Kimmer. Glad you liked it.
KAOlmsted

4 Years Ago

I so did. You're welcome!
Simply lovely, as always. ;) The imagery was impeccable.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jack...

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend
InsanityWriter

4 Years Ago

No problem. :) I'm always happy to read your work! ^_^
An excellent poem, as usual, Jack :) This style of writing was so new and interesting and inspiring to me, I wrote a poem in the same style. You truly are an inspiration to young writers like me everywhere!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jack...

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I just read your poem and loved it. Happy I can inspire you but just so you know,.. read more
LadySoDivine

4 Years Ago

That is one of the biggest compliments I have ever gotten for my writing. And in general. Thank you .. read more
I am thinking the speaker is in the upper level, might be an angel or a watcher :) or else a greatest idea of heaven. Rich visuals and captivating word play :) Great work Mr. Jack.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jack...

4 Years Ago

Thanks sir, it can be whatever you choose, always open for translation.
this one is also a really great one sir..there's vivid imagery explaining the inspirational thougths that you got and shared to us..you're definitely a good writer.:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jack...

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much
amazing, really great write
thank you for sharing

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jack...

4 Years Ago

Thank you for reading. I appreciate it.
Cara

4 Years Ago

:D thanks ^-^ but really it is amazing
Seeing and understanding the magnificence of nature as whole is an enlightening journey. Wonderful write.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jack...

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much Gabriele
( Steep and never ending
The height I am ascending
It seems that I can almost touch the sun)
wow, as if i'm really there!, beautiful, it took me to that place



Posted 4 Years Ago


Jack...

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much Aurora
Salar Majak

4 Years Ago

:)
There are some things in the world that can't be seen by the normal sight... this.. is an exquisite poem of views when you're as high as you can be.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jack...

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much.
Perfect. An absolute joy to read

Posted 4 Years Ago


Jack...

4 Years Ago

Thank you sir.

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Jack...

San Antonio, TX



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Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..

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