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Compartment 114
Compartment 114
But if you try sometimes...

But if you try sometimes...

A Poem by Jack...
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Written with a little help from The Rolling Stones song - "You can't always get what you want"

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But if you try sometimes...

 

 

“I saw her today at the reception”

 

My eyes filled with changing emotions

In satin gown and fire brand hair

A china doll beyond the display case

Happiness was breathing the air

 

“In her glass was a bleeding man”

A shadow of someone on the platform

I could see his face wracked in pain

Scars of here and prior altercations

Acid falling in the guise of rain

 

“She was practiced at the art of deception”

Behind that sequined mask she stood hiding

A smile painted in pastel red

Pretending a friendship is more than just golden

Wishing the other were endlessly dead

 

“Well I could tell by her blood-stained hands”

 

Pointing fingers dripping in excess waste

Smearing the drapes of lipstick tapestry

Planting the seed of doubt deep within

Smirking as she said these words to me

 

“You can’t always get what you want”

© 2013 Jack...


Author's Note

Jack...
Thank you for reading

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As always, you have mastered the art of poetry eloquence. And getting ideas from a song is impressive, you know. Well-penned again. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


ummmm don't mean to sound naive but I sort of kind of have no idea what song this poem is referring to. I wasn't born in the Rolling stones era (I think.....) so all I really know is bad country and pop.... you know, One Direction and Taylor Swift.... But it was a great write jack!
-Dragon :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Justsimplyjulia

10 Years Ago

Ooh spare my eyes! I cannot stand Taylor Swifts new stuff. it is a disgrace to country. whatever hap.. read more
Jack...

10 Years Ago

George Strait won entertainer of the year last night on the CMAs. He lives here in my city. I used t.. read more
Justsimplyjulia

10 Years Ago

Holy cow! THAT IS AMAZING! oh my word I am so jealous.... you are a lucky man Jack....
-Dragon
Nice rewrite of the stones Jack.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Jack...

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend.
"Fire brand hair"eh? Sounds like a redhead. Anyway the poem is a great play off the song. But unfortunately the Stones may have been deluded...quite often we don't get what we want or need. Guess there's no way to sue them for false advertising...right?

Posted 10 Years Ago


Jack...

10 Years Ago

Fire brand hair...nice huh? No I guess we can't sue them, but I can thank them for the inspiration t.. read more
" You can't always get what you want " a song by Rolling Stones . Reminds me of this beautifully crafted piece

Posted 10 Years Ago


Jack...

10 Years Ago

Neil, I used the lyrics from that song as my inspiration for this poem. Like I said before, inspirat.. read more
I couldn't say more, you cant always get what you want. Thank you for sharing this my dear friend Jack. I hope you have been well.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Jack...

10 Years Ago

I have been fine but I am much better now that I get to see your smile on my page. Thank you so very.. read more
God, this is powerful Jack and a classic song to interact with :) Infusion of the highest coolness here love, a fav xx

Posted 10 Years Ago


Jack...

10 Years Ago

Thanks so very much my sweet friend.
OH!!! MY!!! GAWD!!!!!!
This is off the charts, my friend! This is fab-u-tastic!!!!

I wonder what the Rolling Stones would think of this piece??

Keith??? Mr. Richards???? What do you say????????????????

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jack...

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much sweet Angel. Always I am happy when you stop by.
Outstanding drew me in right away..

Posted 10 Years Ago


Jack...

10 Years Ago

Thanks so very much Sarahlin. Happy you stopped by and enjoyed this one.

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Jack...

San Antonio, TX



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Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..

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