The Odyssey of a River

The Odyssey of a River

A Poem by StruckByLightning
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I wrote this poems as an "inspirer" to pick you up if you are feeling down. It is to remind you that everyone can have the strength of a river.

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The river silently flows
across hills, plains, and mountains. 
A forlorn journey toward the sea
as the blue blood of the land.
It must have tripped over
ten million boulders,
yet it chuckles 
and races on
without another thought.
It must have stumbled over
a hundred thousand waterfalls,
yet it picks itself up
from the ground
and continues onward to the sea.
But once it reaches the 
safety of its haven,
it will not pause
for a single breath.
Instead it leaps back
to the start
and restarts its voyage again.
Now what surprises me
most is how the river
with its countless suffers 
and errors can still 
find the strength 
to go on.

© 2012 StruckByLightning


Author's Note

StruckByLightning
This poem is a free write, so the grammar, punctuation, and capitalization is there on purpose.
The image was found on Google Images.

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I must say that your poem as served its purpose. Very motivational!
Great use of the river here. I do recommend you to try adding more imagery to add to the poem's beauty.
And consider stanzas too. They might help. Regardless, I really enjoyed this poem.

The last lines from " Now what surprises me..... to go on" is really incredible!! Well thought of and very well done.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Inspiring...my favorite was the last 6 lines :3

Posted 12 Years Ago


So inspiring! Thank you for such a lovely read at a time of a heavy heart. :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


I must say that your poem as served its purpose. Very motivational!
Great use of the river here. I do recommend you to try adding more imagery to add to the poem's beauty.
And consider stanzas too. They might help. Regardless, I really enjoyed this poem.

The last lines from " Now what surprises me..... to go on" is really incredible!! Well thought of and very well done.


Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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