Strangers of the mind {part 1}

This story entails of a young woman named gia, who has now started to be haunted in her sleep. She keep insuring her self that this dark world of sleep is just that Dreams. Or are they just dreams...

In the still of the night, Gia laid in her bed sleeping. While she laid there sleeping, her eyes begin to move rapidly back and forth, back and forth. As the sweat started to pour from her body. Cause her bright  auburn hair to stick to her neck and forehead. Gia's chest started to rise and fall faster, she started to toss and turn. Crying out "NO....NOOOO!".

 At that very moment she jolts up from her sleep. Wide awake gasping for air. Her heart was pounding. As adrenaline flooded her body. She frantically reached for the lamp to her right. As she sat in the dead silence. The only sound to be heard was her heavy breathing. The hair on her arms and neck begin to rise. She had this unsettling feeling she couldn't shake Gia glance at the alarm clock on her night stand, 3:15 am.  "It was happening again" Gia thought. As she thought back at what she just dreamt a shiver runs down her back. The thought haunting. She opens he night stand draw to grab her rosary. Outside a lighting bolt flashes a purple white light. That shines through her window. Followed by a loud boom, and crack. She jumps at the sound. As the rain being to fall upon the roof top like metal pellets. 

Gia looks out the window and watched as the rain runs down the window, casting the rain streams shadow across the carpet. She replays the nightmare in her head. It always being the same. In this dream. More nightmare if she must say. She was in her room. Every details was the same almost. . 

In this dream world. It was as if Gia was really just awake. As Gia finished brushing her teeth she walked into the hallway just to stop dead in her tracks. As she sees a black shadow rush by the sink. A sec passes as the shadow forms into her beloved cat. "My god Bemo!" She yells Grabbing her chest. "You nearly gave me a heart attack" Bemo just runs between her legs meowing. But for some reason Gia still felt slightly scared, that feeling that something wasn't right ,she couldn't shake it. Only ignore it.  Pass it off as stress and pure tiredness. Since she started her new job at the hospital, her hour of sleep as been less. The boss was far from pleasant and kind. "Ugh come on Bemo let's try to get a "full" nights of sleep" The cat just looks and meow "Yeah I know who am I kidding." Gia walks to her side of the bed and pulls back the covers. Just as she slip under the cotton blue sheets. She switches the light off Bemo jumps on the bed. As she looked at Bemo, she noticed that she had dark golden eyes. Almost like a snake eyes The thought that Bemo's eyes are bright green. Came and went in a matter of secs. "Huh "she sighs "I need sleep Bemo" Gia let's out a slight laugh. As Gia gets snuggled into bed Bemo lays down on the left side pillow. "Night Bemo" Gia begin to fall asleep as she listen to the rain hit the roof top. Just Right as she about falls asleep she hears Bemo meow. "MEOW....,MEOW,....... meow" "Damn it Bemo I'm not letting you out, beside its raining cat" Gia said irritated and groggy  . Then she hears scratching at the window. Long and inpatient scratches. This time Gia madly sits up and looks at the window. Ready to yell at Bemo. Damn it b...e.......mo? Outside the window soaking wet was bemo, frantically pacing back and forward meowing. "BEMO!" Gia yells Right as she gets up Gia gets this unsettling feeling something isn't right . Sitting up Gia then feels a movement next her. Frozen she don't turn she don't  move at this point she isn't breathing. On the left side of her bed she starts to hear heavy breathing ending with a low growl. Raspy. "Gasp....grr ....Gasp....grrr" As Gia slow turns her head. Her eye widen with fear. What she thought was Bemo was now a black figure shaped as a cat. Before she can jump to run. The black cat jumps of the bed as it hits mid air it forms into a man. But no man of this world. He was black as night. He recked with a fowl oder. He had no face just beyond jet black head. He lands in the corner by the door. His back to Gia. He slowly turns to face her. In a slit second she was right in front of this dark evil figure. Confused Gia, stood frozen, she had  rush of fear. But still couldn't move as if it was holding her still. It then spoke but it was as if he spoke telepathy

 "Do I seem whiter too you" its voice was like RAZER blades to her mind.

 The foul creature spoke again

"Do I look taller to you?" 

It then laughed It laugh was like thunder. As that moment the black evil creature grew taller. Its head reached to the ceiling. At that moment Gia could move she turns and rushes to the door as she grabs the door knob she still could hear it evil laugh behind her. She turns the knob as she run through the door she can't believed what's she saw on the other side....... 

                 .......,,..TO BE CONTINUED

Author's Note

Please let me know if you feel the story.
Or if it is actually scary.
Or if it is predictable.

Reviews

[MightyMouse]

Wow seriously Edgar Allen Poe take it easy!!! That was really good. there were a few typos, but it was actually scary. I could guess that the cat wasn't hers, but only shortly before she actually figured it out herself. I usually do predict things, but it's only because I read so much, not because it's obvious. Well done.

[Jasmine]

Thank you, yes I do need to work on the darn typos =) ha. I am still very new to writing. As I read back I to can see it coming, no because I wrote it of course but, because it is quite seeable. I am very glad you like it over all

[matrixmark]

There are a few typos, try spacing the paragraphs out too - it would make reading it a lot easier.

That said and done - i loed how the black cat morphed into a man and lands in the corner by the door. The character getting taller and its head hitting the roof was pretty impressive i have to say. Good, quick, confrontation at the end before it rushes out the door.

It is scary to think about things like this happening, yes. No it wasnt predictable.

Will follow this story if you do more.

Mark.

[Darkswing]

It was an amazing story. Can't wait to read the next part. Good Job!!!!.

[Jasmine]

Thank you! I am so glad you enjoyed it

[Darkswing]

No problem. Can't wait for more of your stories... :)