reflections

 I watch the girl sit on her bed, 

She looks alone,
I see something in her hand
If only I could get close enough.

She lifts the object into the air,
I see a tear roll down her cheek,
She has done this before,
"maybe", she thinks.

"This can be the last time",
I watch her as she lowers the glowing blade,
She presses it into her skin,
She makes no attempt at swiping it.

She presses and presses,
I see a fine red line appear before my eyes,
I want to yell at her to stop,
I can not find my voice.

She moves the knife away,
Looks at it,
Suddenly she swipes her wrists,
The blood is flowing now.

Spilling onto the floor like a red sea of death,
She throws the knife,
It lands on her floor,
She gets up,
I can no longer see her.

I frantically search for her,
I want to help!
Oh thank god,
She sits down and I can see her again.

The tears are steadily flowing now,
I want to comfort her,
I reach out my hand,
I touch nothing but my reflection in the mirror. 

Reviews

[Adam Greenfield]

Holy s**t. Ok, first of all, there is a sense of floating above the situation instead of looking in the mirror but I really like that. You do that by putting your reflection in the third person. Nice twist. I also like the fact that this more flows than rhymes. Great write and great read.

[Dead Angel]

wow! very moving and yet scary.

The tears are steadily flowing now,
I want to comfort her,
I reach out my hand,
I touch nothing but my reflection in the mirror.

my favorite part, this twist blew me away and made me open my eyes. i have felt this way before but not as vivid as you described here. very good poem. :)

[Vincent Maltese]

Wow. Crazy, Good, Perspective creating. Nice write

[Nick Erickson]

Very vivid and clear. You did an excellent job of describing your character, your feelings.

I" reach out my hand,
I touch nothing but my reflection in the mirror."

Very good. Both you and your sis have the gift.

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OMG, this was absolutely moving. It touched me very much. Yes, I too, feel this way often. It is so hard, i swear. I felt every word you said. It was definitely amazing! Everything will be alright, I know it will :)

*Hugs*

Mikey

[Rob Welch , Master Of P..]

Ooooo wow I loved this one. It just kinda flows and gives you the sense that you're watching all these events happening. Simply amazing. Keep up the great work!

[Morgan A Lynch]

oh.. sam i am sorry about this.. i wish i could help you fix this and be able to help her..