When We Walked That Night

Moonlit moments

We watched the moon

When we walked that night

With the white ivory sphere

 Reflecting in our eyes.

 

Our heads were both

In the dark clouds

That eerily floated around it

 In a thousand clumps of black.

 

With the world against us,

we were just two friends walking.

But we were more than friends that night.

I knew it from the second our eyes

reached the sky together.

We were just a pair of moon-crossed lovers.

 

 I drove home the next night,

Missing you every second.

 But then I looked up at the sky

And knew that you were watching it too.

 

When we walked that night

You were finally in my arms.

It felt so right to hold you

Beneath the bright moonlight.

 

Soon our hearts were entwined

By the moon’s silvery spell.

And we finally changed our fate.

 

A moonbeam shone down from above,

As if the whole sky was watching us.

It witnessed our lips softly touching

And our smiles shining brighter than ever.

 

I’ve walked every night since then,

Watching the bright moon illuminate the sky.  

And I know that you’re watching it too,

Wherever you are.

                                  

 

 

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

I loved this..very romantic and nice..and it reminded me of dear john by nicolas sparks :)...there are some breathtaking phrases here...well written.

[Allyson (:]

This is a great poem, it reminds me of the classy teenage romance type thing, the ending made me smile, because it reminded me of my old memories, i love the part were you wrote
''But when i looked up into the sky, you were watching it too''
:)
enjoy writing!

[Lightfalls]

The moonlight, and night seems to change your entire world into a different place entirely. I know I am most happy by night; almost a different person, and definitely in a different world.

"Our heads were both
In the dark clouds"

Loved that! And the rest of your metaphors that you changed slightly to give new meaning to them, and for them to better fit with your own thoughts, were great to read, and made this piece interesting and with a life of its own.

[Emily]

This is a beautiful piece about the connection you can feel to one person through the wide universe of the sky. I like the way this written. The flow and the subject are very good. It leaves a few good questions for the reader too because we begin to wonder why they had to leave one another and when they would see each other again.

Nice work, enjoy writing!