Dancer's prayer

 

                          Dancer’s Prayer 

 

 

                              If I dance in your shadow might you guide me to light?

                              If I dance all alone might our feet reunite?

                              If I dance in silence might you hum me your songs?

                              If I dance with reserve might you teach me my wrongs?

                              If I dance with the angels might you share in my grace?

                              If I've lessened in spirit might you dance in my place?

                              Should I stop dancing, might you cradle me there?

                              And whisper-there's purpose in each dance we share.

Reviews

[Dianne S Penfold]

This was wonderfully written. I love the way the words flow, line after line. Very smooth and song like. Good job :)

[John Ciarmello]

Thank You Dianne

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the flow of thoughts and I do like the movement of the words. The dance. We shall do many kinds of dances and hope for a proper ending. Thank you John for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[John Ciarmello]

Thank you for the review my friend

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome John. I will return later and read more. I have a house full today of my grandchildren.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Awe, The 'what if' game set to music. Musicals live on this page and flow freely. Very nice.

[John Ciarmello]

Thank You for the review Cherrie!

[John Ciarmello]

Thank you so much for the review Hannah. Ya know, around the 999,999th time I read this piece I thought the same thing! lol. I will finally try it without.

[H L Rose]

I like how much there is to analyze in this poem. Each line can provoke a multitude of thoughts and ideas.

I do my best to be helpful in reviews, so if there is any constructive criticism I could offer, I may suggest that the word “that” in the last line, might throw the flow off. But I could definitely be wrong. Just a suggestion.

Enjoyed reading it!

[John Ciarmello]

Thank You for the great review Hannah. It was much fun to write! I took your advice! No more (that)

[H L Rose]

I’m glad my review was of use to you!