Black Hummingbirds Flew

Black Hummingbirds Flew

A Poem by John Ciarmello

                      Black Humming Birds flew

 

 

 In my mind I can see

 black hummingbirds fly.

 In the corners they swoop, while glass figures cry.

 They sail on updrafts,

 where the past laughs and flaunts.

 Black hummingbirds watch, in the darkness they taunt.

 They feed not on nectar's or sweetness's grown,

 they feed on the minds of the people well known.

 Wings hum in the darkness, black shadows on black,

  as they jet in and out of the minds

 files once stacked.

 Glowing eyes

 in each corner, their wings sow

 a low groan;

 in the depths of the minds of the people well known.

 Hands clenched to their heads.

 These- where black hummingbirds fly.

 They fall to their knees and these glass figures try;

 to get up and focus on things they once knew.

 It's time.

 The darkness.

 Then- black hummingbirds

 flew.


© 2018 John Ciarmello



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Right off I'm jolted into a whole new way of thinking about my favorite gracefully humming feathered friends! Your words are very original & flow with an ominous threat, combining unexpected imagery successfully. I'm not that good at interpreting nuanced poetry, so I took a peek at Lydia's review & suddenly I could see those dark thoughts swarming as she suggested. (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 9 Months Ago


John Ciarmello

9 Months Ago

I thank you so much for the review barlegirl! I apologize for draining the color from such a beautif.. read more
The rhythm of your words and the rhyme scheme is intoxicating. "Black hummingbirds"...dark thoughts....they infiltrate our everyday lives in so many different ways. Allowing them to fly away is the way to find peace. Well written. Lydi**

Posted 9 Months Ago


John Ciarmello

9 Months Ago

Thank You for the great review, Lydia. I entered it in the dark poetry contest. LOL
They sal on up drafts where the past laughs and flaunts

Posted 9 Months Ago


Thank you for the review, Cherrie. I try not to go dark to often.

Posted 9 Months Ago


I thank You much for that review, Sami. It was at a time when I needed to nourish my dark side. To pick the most beautiful and make it dark turns on the minds light. Its simply something I live by when I feel dark. lol

Posted 9 Months Ago


Awesome, love the flow the rhythm and images. You have rebirthed the mad Starlings into its own vivid tale of darkness.

Posted 9 Months Ago


John Ciarmello

9 Months Ago

sorry Cherrie It seems I put my response to your review in my review box lol. I've figured it out no.. read more
Cherrie Palmer

9 Months Ago

It 'll work lol
A majestic poem on a majestic small bird. Intricate details and full of life. Nothing short of engraving the minds with wonder.

Posted 9 Months Ago


John Ciarmello

9 Months Ago

Sorry Sami new here. It seems I've put my response to your review in my review box. I've got it down.. read more
Sami Khalil

9 Months Ago

No problem. It is all ok. You are welcome.

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John Ciarmello
John Ciarmello

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I'm a 58 year old enthusiastic writer of short story and Children's rhyme. I love to try all types of writing. I love the challenge of flash fiction. I'm not sure I have a novel in me though! We shall.. more..

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