PRIMAL SCREAM REALITY

PRIMAL SCREAM REALITY

A Poem by jeannemarie coulter
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a very rough day

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PRIMAL SCREAM REALITY

when the walls are mush
and the floors whisper pain
to the touch of my feet
as
exit signs glow
in all the rooms behind my eyes
like crystal shards shattering
and
the expanding reality sucks my blood
as swamp leeches fasten to the eyes of dead soldiers...
then
the primal scream of my soul writhing
is therapy only because the sound is real...




© 2015 jeannemarie coulter


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Amazing use of words my dear Poet friend. The words create dangerous places and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


That was a terrifying read. And I love the lines:

"as
exit signs glow
in all the rooms behind my eyes"

because we're all looking for an escape, in one way or another, from this reality that we're all stuck in.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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jeannemarie, I hope you know by now that I am a big fan of yours. You write things that are fun and amusing, or of historical import...and then you write a piece like this. The depth, the vast expanse of feeling you imbue in your writes is astounding. I could try to dissect the piece and tell you how good it is THAT way, but it's better as a whole entity and, well...indescribable. As a writer I pride myself on my ability to frame my feelings in descriptive and intelligent wording. And for this, I have nothing...except this is freakin' GREAT! My most enthusiastic compliments! take care...dan

Posted 8 Years Ago


I hope you feel better. Here's a funny story. I have around thirty read requests from you. My god, slow down!!! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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jeannemarie coulter

8 Years Ago

will slow down on the requests and i apologize for them...i enjoy your comments and do thank you fo.. read more
pain needing to be released... this is powerful write...

and the floors whisper pain
to the touch of my feet

You capture this perfectly you can feel it!! Brilliant

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jeannemarie coulter

8 Years Ago

thank you so much and blessings to you as well...
'like crystal shards shattering'
I am not sure why, but this line seemed to make the poem better!
Keep it up!

Posted 8 Years Ago


sounds like your soul is crying out for unjust and oppressed as well as your pain

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jeannemarie coulter

8 Years Ago

i saw a woman today both eyes blackened one arm in a sling with purple black marks on every part of .. read more
 wordman

8 Years Ago

i have no idea why men feel the need to beat up their wives,
I have a high pain threshold for pain and your words were making my temples begin to pulse! Owe!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jeannemarie coulter

8 Years Ago

i hope your pain has passed...i was trying to describe deep horrible loss and pain...i guess you und.. read more
Perkele.7885

8 Years Ago

indeed, some of my buttons are very sensitive indeed they are! What a poor thing I am!
yes, the release of pain...wow...this is so good...and i couldn't help thinking of a movie i saw when i was a kid...own it now on DVD..."Mr. Sardonicus"---there are echoes of that film in this....for various reasons.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

jeannemarie coulter

8 Years Ago

will check out the movie...thanks for the read and i am glad it touched you deeply...
Yes, I can so relate to the release of pain.
Excellent poetry.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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