The Time The Sky Fell

Please read this, it would mean a lot to me.

Dear daddy,

Do you remember the night the sky fell?

Plummeting down here towards us

As I giggled at your jokes and teased you about your prickly beard

And those furry "gorilla arms."

We were sitting tucked under a scratchy blanket,

You in your lumberjack clothes

And me in my american girl pajama's,

As we sat on the swinging bench in the cooling night air and gazed at the stars.

We watched as the butterflies and hummingbirds dozed off,

And for a short moment there was complete silence,

Which you were compelled to point out to me,

And then came the crickets.

And I sang to you proudly, showing off my voice

As you smiled and hummed tunelessly along with me.

And as my eyelids began to droop,

You held me close and recited your own poetry with me named "peanut" or "kurmedgeon."

And then, with a sharp intake of breath,

You shook me just a bit and pointed out the falling star.

I realize it was probably a satellite now,

But I still think my wish will come true, so I can't say.

And though you've chosen not to speak with me for a while now,

I love you, and I will always love you,

And maybe, if you don't remember that night,

I'm glad I can still share and recall the time the sky fell.

Author's Note

captcha: amazed

Let me just say that I know that the kurmudgeon is not a word, but if you look you'll notice its in quotes, because that's what he referred to me as. No, I don't know what a kurmudgeon is. :P

This is a legitimate story about my dad and I. :)

Reviews

[Anjali]

The relation of a father and daughter is awesome. Your story touched my heart. Good job Riley.

[Isabelle Faye]

Wow. Just...wow. This poem quite literally gave me goosebumps. It's chillingly honest and amazingly well penned. I really love it! The simplicity with which you write just furthers the emotions in this poem. Well done!

[Riley Bray]

Thanks again Isable. X3 Moments like these are important to write about.

[Zoe Marie Ross]

This is a nice memory, it is good that you great memories to look back on. I do not have any memories as my father wasn't around. I hope thing's work out between you both.

[Riley Bray]

I hope so to. He tends to go through cycles with visiting me, leaving around October and coming back sometimes in May, or around then. I can relate to not really having a father around but not as much as someone could. I'm glad I have these memories too, and thank you for the review. :)

[carol burgess romance]

wonderful imagery....such a lovely poem...

[Riley Bray]

Thank you. :)

[Just Kim]

very emotional read, thanks for sharing this

[Riley Bray]

Thanks for the review. :D

[Shivam Murari]

That's a nice write. One small correction, "And maybe, if you DON'T remember the night."

[Riley Bray]

Oh my gosh, how did I not notice that?!?! Sheesh. Thanks for pointing that out!

[Shivam Murari]

:) Anytime. Why did the father of the poet leave?

[Riley Bray]

I have yet to find that out myself...He's a real dad and I guess...I don't know. Heh. e.e

[Shivam Murari]

So that's your story or you just thought of it?

[Riley Bray]

Mine.

[Shivam Murari]

oh okay. ):)

[Tai Ryens]

Letters to an old relationship, just lovely. Gloomy emotions seem to linger despite the happy thoughts, but more of a haunting feeling by the reader, as we were the fathers laying watchful eyes on the letter. Well done!

[Riley Bray]

Thanks! I didn't realize it was haunting but now that I think about it that actually makes sense. :)

[quinfinn]

curmudgeon is an awkward word. it usually refers to a cantankerous old fool, or a useless hobo, or a mangy dog....it is not a pet name by any means. i have heard it used many times as a slur....this poem is awesome, treasured moments with dad, which are long gone for whatever unexplained reasons. i liked it very much.

[Riley Bray]

Lol weird. He did spell it with a k though so maybe it means something else? XD Anyway thanks for giving me some type of hint and the review!

[Delaney]

This is truly beautiful. It honestly makes me kind of relate to my relationship with my dad, we're really have a close bond. And he's much older than my friend's parents are, so I worry a lot about the time limit I have with him and cherish the moments I have with him, or try to. It's very nostalgic, but very warm, too. I hope all works out with your father, it's a very important relationship to hold.

Yours truly, Delaney

[Riley Bray]

I agree that its an important relationship, and thank you for both reviewing and wishing me luck with him. I understand the worry, my dad is a bit older than my friends dad as well.

[Delaney]

You are welcome, I'm glad there is some common ground between us and our fathers. It helps the connection between writer and reader.

[Riley Bray]

It really does. :)

[minnie:)]

Wow, this is really good! :)

[Riley Bray]

Thank you. X3