Contemporary

The light bends over her,

Arched arms reaching,

Ever sorrowfully, to the heavens,

But will her fingertips ever scrape the sky?

Her soft exhales

Blend fresh aromas,

Painting a picture in sensory detail,

But will her fingertips ever  scrape the sky?

Her fluid movements

Hail gentle winds

That twirl her across the lush grass,

But will her fingertips ever scrape the sky?

Her long, elegant hair

Flows down her smooth back,

Flying behind her like wings,

But will her fragile body ever sit among the stars?

 as she leaps from the ground.

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I see you kept a strict format here...
with 3 lines per stanza...
the repeating line and the effect...
within each reading...
I wonder if the last line in the last stanza...
can be modified and give this more...
like example:

Her long, elegant hair
Flows down her smooth back,
Flying behind her like wings as she leaps from the ground,

But will her fragile body ever sit among the stars?
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Her long, elegant hair
Flows down her smooth back,
Flying behind her like wings,

But will her fragile body ever sit among the stars?

as she leaps from the ground...

[Riley Bray]

Hello! It's always nice to see a new face reviewing every now and then, so a welcome to my page! The way you changed it is so beautiful! Naturally now I'm going to have to change it haha. Thank you very much for the input it is dearly appreciated!

[Glen Yumang Manese]

We are here to excel in our writings...and give feedback...glad you liked what I had to offer...

[Tai Ryens]

Elegant, breathtaking poetry you've here, I could just imagine the girl restricted by things she can't see as she leaps to the heavens, hoping to caress them . . . Well done

[Riley Bray]

Thanks Tai, happy you enjoyed it. X3