A Vampires Lunch

just a cute little dark poem

 

The moon shines down upon the blood drenched grass

Staring at the now dead lass

She liked to laugh and love to sing

Now she is food for the darkest fiend

Teeth as sharp as razor blades

Tear skin away from the wound it’s made

No one would guess who has done the deed

Because in their minds they could not believe

In their eyes we all look the same

But that is just another game

A vampires nights are meant to feed

Just like humans we are drawn by greed

So don’t believe you can’t be touched

Or else like this lass

you might be lunch.

Reviews

[Hayame]

Great poem, oddly I saw a little bit of a social message in it. The vampires are attracted to greed and therefore feed on greedy people? Fantastic.

The poem had good flow and was just the right length to hold my attention.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations on your vampire-contest win!

Sal

[Fran Marie]

A vampires nights are meant to feed
Just like humans we are drawn by greed
So don't believe you can't be touched
Or else like this lassyou might be lunch.

So glad you warned me about those greedy vamps

I hope I am not caught for their lunch~ I can't stand the sight of

blood~ well not my own anyway~lol~A delightful dark write and most enjoyable to read

WeLL DonE!!~THanks for submitting to Darkness Becomes you ConTest~Fran Marie

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

hahahaha... I love it, it's so cute and fun yet still dark, thats a very rare find. It seemed to flow very well and it showed that vampires are still vampires not like in twilight books (although they are good lol) Good Job! A great vampire write! :D

[Cassandra]

hehe indeed a cute .. but dark write. I feel some of your 'tenses' could be a little more uniform but other than that i thought this to be a good vampire poem...the lighter side of the vampire if you will.