WALK AWAY

A little something for change in the new year.

I wonder

I wonder

I wonder why it goes

I deny it

Try to fight it

Against the way it flows

I ignore it

I deplore it

Try to push it far away

But I fear it

I'm too near it

And it haunts me every day

For circling in the skies are things

I wish I could disguise

That melt to crystal teardrop

And it makes me realize

That I’m part of it

Not above it

And I’m not the way I was

Oh, I hate it

Execrate it

And everything it does

So I’ll change it

Rearrange it

Try to start another day

Then I’ll stop it

Yeah, I'll stop it

And I’ll turn and walk away

 

…Jeff Bresee

Reviews

[Emma Joy]

Love the rhythm of the lines .. can hear it so clearly. Not sure if this poem is intended as lyrics but could so easily be ..

'And it makes me realize That I’m part of it Not above it And I’m not the way I was Oh, I hate it Execrate it And everything it does ' .. don't we all feel like that sometimes about something .. trouble is we can't put it as finely as you have!

[M J Moore]

The rhythm, synchronization of this is excellent. I like your style. I like how you left it a pronoun. 'It' could be someone, something, a thought, an event, anything. This allows the reader to put their own "it" instead, so it becomes a shared feeling between you and the reader and the poem itself. Nicely done.

[J. Marc]

Great! I love the very human struggle between the opposite feelings! TO walk away can be very reassuring!

[luke312]

Good stuff Mr. Bresee

[Dwayne]

This reminds me of addiction, chemical or otherwise, how it invades one's life and how hard it is to choose to turn your back on it.

[Gandré]

Yes, we just rearrange our constellations, and life looks rosy again.. I loved this, as always good writing, through the short lines this had a pace, I liked the idea that we simply make another choices when that what 'we've got is sorrowful.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Great poem Jeff. As always you have captivated me with your writing.

[esk]

Liked the rythm and flow, I could hear this being read aloud, whispered lyrics.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

The theme of this poem is surely very striking and has been written in a very different and appealing manner.
Very well written!

[SamBug]

This one flows extremely well!!!! I couldn't help but recite it out loud because it was so fun to read. You did an amazing job.

[Unique_ Renee]

I loved the lyrical rhythm of this poem. it shows real thought in this. just like Emma 'And it makes me realize That I’m part of it Not above it And I’m not the way I was Oh, I hate it Execrate it And everything it does ' .. don't we all feel like that sometimes about something .. trouble is we can't put it as finely as you have!
I loved that line