DAYS END

Be the reason

The days don’t seem to give a damn

They march in step of time

They stare ahead with eyes of steel

While never breaking line

 

They torture me with disregard

They tread upon my soul

They seem so unaware I’m here

They simply come and go

 

I once believed the day would come

I hoped that it would give

The thing that I was searching for

A reason I should live

 

But in the end my hope was vain

Cause nothing’s ever come

I’m tired of holding on and so

I feel the fight is done

 

Thus here I sit as night rolls in

The choice is mine to make

The glare across the steel call out

“What action will you take”?

 

…Jeff Bresee

Reviews

[Kena SunGoddess Dawn]

Wow.....that's all I can say. That was so powerful it almost swept me right off my chair. It's almost as if the person is contemplating suicide, wondernig why life is so hard. i know, sometimes i sit around and wonder why the days are so hard, and life seems unlivable. one of my favorite lines is:

They stare ahead with eyes of steel

While never breaking line

amazing!! Also, I like the font. As if you went and typed this poem up on a typewriter, old school, I love it.

[Aislinn Gryffin ((Ashes..]

Terrific rhyming poem. i love the thought process and the slant rhymes in the beginning.

[Poet Sayings]

Wow jeff, you have a really in tuned way with your flow and voice, and the reader can pick up on this effect and rhythm and the wisdom seems lived through
you haveb a marvelous way with wording, this was awsome.

[*~Poetic_Essence~*]

I really like this, I like the ryhming scheme, it is not forced obvious, it flows and I love that. I have strayed away from rhyming poems over these past few years and I have just been writing free-verse. But rhyming poems were how I first got hooked to poetry. Your poem has made me miss what I use to do and inspired me to pick it up again.

I really enjoyed that write...

Well From One Word-Play Poet To The Next...Always Remember To Write With Your Heart!!!

[Sara]

i reread this poem quite a few times and each time i did so i liked it more and more. for one thing, i can *so* relate. let me go off on a tangent here for a second and say these last couple of years i have been struggling with depression, and with finding a purpose for my life. the lines "I once believed the day would come/I hoped that it would give/The thing that I was searching for/A reason I should live" -- god, those words struck such a chord in me. i'm in college now, and it feels like everyday i am searching for that *something* to feel passionate about, to dedicate my life to whole-heartedly -- and i'm so afraid i won't find it... okay, as to the poem itself, i have to say i love the sad rhythm to it, how it mirrors the rather slow march of day after day after day you describe... when i read this, strangely enough, the color grey comes to mind -- a sort of bleak, washed-out grey... it's a lovely piece of work, though, and i hope writing these words down have helped give you some measure of comfort.

[Beth]

True, days march on and on. But it's up the individual to make of the day what they wish to happen.

Good rhyme & rhythm - keep it up!

[Tate Morgan]

Oh man you have grown this is excellent excellent AND DEEP

[Tommy]

I like this piece, it is sad, but true to the feeling I have felt throughout my life. Somehow I always choose to hope again, "vane," or maybe more like survival.
Nice Write!

RLG,
Tommy