A Whisper to the Silence

A Whisper to the Silence

A Poem by JELLYCAT

I am a ripple on your safe, still surface,
A disturbing craze that startles you.
You fear to see me completely.
Because I can shake you out of simplicity and it scares you.
Maybe you'd love it too much.

I understand that love isn't everlasting.
I know that your reasons to be distant are full as the moon tonight.
But my trembling heart is still young and needs to live a little more.
My tears are the only friends that understand me anymore.

I am a spot of color on your monochrome landscape.
A sliver of hope that sickens you.
You hate to want me near.
Because I am not like the other people and it worries you.
Maybe you'd love me too much.

I understand that love isn't everlasting.
I know that your reasons to be distant are full as the moon tonight.
But my trembling heart is still young and needs to live a little more.
My tears are the only friends that understand me
anymore.










© 2015 JELLYCAT



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All I have to say is wow. You most certainly have a very unique and powerful writing voice here on this website! This is a EXTREMELY clever poem/song you have written here! The idea of Silence actually fearing a Whisper, and the fact that a whisper would technically give Silence nightmares(if silence and whispers were personified) is such a simple one, and yet I can't think of anybody who has ever thought of it like that though. Color me impressed, VERY impressed by this piece. Not only are you a stunningly extraordinary writer, you have great taste in music as well! I'm speechless, really I am. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JELLYCAT

2 Years Ago

Aw dear, that is very sweet of you. You give me a lot of hope and positivity. Thank you for your kin.. read more
DoormanDan

2 Years Ago

You're welcome :)



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I really liked this, also Muse! But Radiohead! Lol...

I loved your illustration.

Favorite lines...
"I am a spot of color on your monochrome landscape."

"A sliver of hope that sickens you."



Posted 4 Months Ago


It sounds like you could be an addiction? Jellycat... Jellycat... how are you doing? (Singing). I enjoy your far-out poetry.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Another one.... ugh. You kids gotta find a new topic.

You write okay but it's very clichéd. A lot of your lines are mash ups of song lyrics and famous lines ("my trembling heart...." come on, you got heart disease or too much William Butler Yeats disease? Either way, it's not a good thing for your style or theme)

Functional but ultimately a tired emo tone on a tired emo topic.... C-, not very good.

Posted 1 Year Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JELLYCAT

1 Year Ago

What was the "emo topic" exactly in your mind...I know that a few lines of it sounds emotional, but .. read more
Dead Alive Dave

1 Year Ago

I do and I will. I appreciate your relatively measured response.
Love is an entity of emotion as if an apparition that haunts the hearts. I always enjoy your work and unique perspectives.

Posted 1 Year Ago


JELLYCAT

1 Year Ago

thank you! :)
I am a ripple on your safe, still surface,
A disturbing craze that startles you.


I am a spot of color on your monochrome landscape.
A sliver of hope that sickens you.

the quoted lines really hooked me...they read like the music sounds...this is beautiful even to an old crone like me...well done, indeed...

Posted 2 Years Ago


JELLYCAT

2 Years Ago

aw thank you so much!
So sad and yet... so beautiful how their feelings are also accepted. To suffer in silence, many people do because they believe it's easier to make others happy that way. Just don't forget to live for yourself every now and then :)
An emotionally captivating poem that moves the heart.

Posted 2 Years Ago


JELLYCAT

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much amber! :)
I enjoyed reading this piece but to be totally honest I'm at a loss of the meaning behind it. As a reader we don't always "need to know" the meaning behind work of others to respect and admire the work. It is written very nice I am just a simple person maybe that's just it. I will have to read more of your work .

Posted 2 Years Ago


JELLYCAT

1 Year Ago

Its from my experience about someone who loved me, and how I felt when they stopped talking to me. W.. read more
I'll be honest. I'm speechless. This is very intricately written. I'll have to read it a few more times to understand what the poem is saying to me. I love the artistry behind it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JELLYCAT

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much :) you are very kind
Wow! I can definitely relate to this write. "My tears are the only friends that understand me anymore." Those words especially! I love your style, love your thoughts and you are an awesome writer!

Posted 2 Years Ago


JELLYCAT

2 Years Ago

:) thank you so much!!!
All I have to say is wow. You most certainly have a very unique and powerful writing voice here on this website! This is a EXTREMELY clever poem/song you have written here! The idea of Silence actually fearing a Whisper, and the fact that a whisper would technically give Silence nightmares(if silence and whispers were personified) is such a simple one, and yet I can't think of anybody who has ever thought of it like that though. Color me impressed, VERY impressed by this piece. Not only are you a stunningly extraordinary writer, you have great taste in music as well! I'm speechless, really I am. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

JELLYCAT

2 Years Ago

Aw dear, that is very sweet of you. You give me a lot of hope and positivity. Thank you for your kin.. read more
DoormanDan

2 Years Ago

You're welcome :)

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