The girl in the Corner

 

 

To she who sits in the corner
to her who makes my heart warmer
for the girl that completes my days
for the lady that my heart obeys

 

I offer words that are unspoken
In writing I bind it unbroken

testimony of affection
I hope is worth your attention

 

to the dame who enjoys reading
to the doll my heart is needing

the muse who has my mind at bay
the queen that takes my breath away

 

I delcare my admiration
The reason to my elation

your affection be forbidden
My desire shall not be hidden

 

To the empress who rules my soul
To the princess who makes me whole
for the butterfly of my thought
for the woman who has me caught

 

I adore you i know not why
you truly are my hearts desire
You are the light in my darkness
you give me strenght in my weakness

 

This I write in praise of the girl
more precious that any other pearl
heart of a dreamer I offer
To she who sits in the corner

Reviews

[kogomai1]

i sit here and i try to think of something to say... but i cant, its as if this poem has been written from so deep inside the soul that humanity has no right to try and put limits on it by anybody trying to critic it..
the girl who is mentioned in this must have done something special indeed for you to reward her with your heart and soul as is so obviously done in your poem here.

[Tasfia Islam]

Awww....this is damn cute.... that she must be really lucky... :)

[jemaral]

Im not sure if she shares that opinion... neverthless im glad you enjoyed this piece

[Tasfia Islam]

Honestly, I really can't stop myself from reading this piece over and over again.... The way u described her with different words like doll, queen, etc...., the way u did the rhyming in each stanza, the way u expressed your actual feelings (I guess), everything is really outstanding... This poem deserves an award, seriously..... U must be a proffesional writer, am I right? Anyways, loved your poem thissssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss much....haha. Keep it up. :)

[sonnie ibadah]

you made simple words flow beautifully and yet managed to keep a great ryme pattern. you've managed to write a love poem without sounding corny. beautiful work!

[jemaral]

Im glad you liked it. I did put a bit of effort in not making any cliche phrases into this one.

[sonnie ibadah]

well, ur efforts paid off. nice work

[yuki]

This is cute if there is a girl in the picture tell her this any poetry makes a girls heart warm.

[jemaral]

yeah there is... Unfortunately shes taken...

[yuki]

Ahh thats so sad

[Mirra]

This is so sweet :-) I like how you used different words to represent her and not just using the usual or my love .. Also I gotta say, great work on the rhyme scheme ^_^ excellent work !

[jemaral]

im glad you liked it... im a bit challenged in writing poetry that does not rhyme...