I Never Had A Chance

about betrayal of love...........................

 

I Never Had A Chance

 

I’m longing for a faithful love

While you just play the field

It seems that you enjoy the chase

At least, until they yield.

 

Some day, some one will catch you,

I hope and pray it’s me,

For you already have my heart,

Without it ------- I’m not free.

 

You said -----you thought you loved me

Asked me to be your wife.

It seemed my prayers were answered

My love was yours ------ for life.

 

We were wed not quite a year

You began to come home late.

I fought the haunting fears I had

I trusted you --- I’d wait.

 

My friends tell me you’re cheating

They know that you’re untrue,

They’ve seen you loving someone else

While I wait ----- at home ---for you.

 

Alone I wait, while you yield

To the thrill of secret romance

From the day you took my heart

I never had ------ a chance.

 

You said -- you thought you loved me

Asked me to be your wife

It seemed my prayers were answered

My love was yours ---- for life

Alone I wait – while you yield

To the thrill of secret romance

From the day you took my heart

I never had ------a chance.

 

 

 

ã Copyright JG 2000

Author's Note

any and all thoughts, views, comments please -- Thank you

Reviews

[A.J. Smith]

Beautifully written, sadly tragic poem, Jen. It flows so nicely, your rhyming and structure accomplished so thoughtfully. I think this line, which is so important to the entire pom, is particularly well crafted: "...Alone I wait, while you yield...To the thrill of secret romance...." I love how you repeated the two key previous verses, combined and in italics, in your final verse. Very nice work, Jen. Of course, it made me sad to read. How could it not?

[~crazy Beautiful~]

these lines
"
You said -- you thought you loved me

Asked me to be your wife

It seemed my prayers were answered

My love was yours ---- for life

Alone I wait � while you yield

To the thrill of secret romance

From the day you took my heart

I never had ------a chance."
were by far my favorite
it brought me into the emotions of the piece
Nice work
thank you for entering my contest

[PhoeniX]

very good flow of words. drescription is wonderful. well written out. good job

[Tania Leigh]

Excellent expression here, jen.....a most heart-breaking topic. I agree with A.J. about the last stanza....very effective. Great write!

[BrightEyes]

the heart becomes the master at times - when our head knows better- we see the truth but our heart lies to us - and love lets us believe it will conquer all. truly we have no choice what our heart feels - love is love after all and part of that is the overlooking of the flaws of another. I couldnt find anything that I would change here - great write.

laura