All the Music Stopped

a love lost poem ...................

 

All the Music Stopped

 

All the music stopped, my love

The day you went away

The birds will never sing again

Till you come home to stay.

 

Once my world was happy

Filled with gaiety and song

Now my world seems empty

And I don’t know what went wrong.

 

Now you’re gone – my world is grey

I’m always feeling blue.

I cannot find the strength to fight

This love – I feel for you,

 

These grey words on plain grey paper

Are all that I have left

Sad grey words on plain grey paper

And dreams --- we never kept.

 

 

© Copyright jen- JG 2000

Author's Note

Thought, feelings, comments please - all welcome.

Reviews

[Avocations of Amber]

I can feel the emotion in this poem. You have also have a good rhythm here and the details of it paint a lovely, but sorrowful, scene. Your words flow together nicely and the idea stays the same throughout. I also like the title that you gave this poem. As soon as I began reading it, I could almost hear that music stopping. I'm a sap for poems about love, even the sad ones. Kudos to you......

[thecoolone52]

i liked it... not sure if your gona win or place in the shorty poem contest but you never know i guess... but i enjoyed it... have you ever heard the song America pie....... by Don Mclean i think thats his name.... thats what this song reminded me of... Werid Al did a parody of it about stars wars... anyway good write i enjoyed it

[justjenn_2u]

Very touching. The emptiness of a lost love, how painful and no words can take the pain away. When the healing is over, strength is reborn.

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

sweet. I wish the last stanza wasn't so repetitive, though. The rhymes are very simple, but it works. Thanks for sharing

[JC Fox]

This was a sad poem but you filled it with such emotion that it really brings the reader in to feel your pain. Good job!