Too Wet!

a liitle fun write when it was really raining hard......................

 

TOO WET

 

 

A frog hops past in a grey raincoat

And wearing gum boots in his feet

"Too wet" he croaked "too wet for me"

Then he jumped up in a tree.

 

A duck waddled past with a big umbrella

Protecting her snow white back

"Too wet" she quacked "Too wet for me"

Then she joined the frog in the tree.

 

A bird’s nest built in the roof-top

Had a down pipe flooding over

"Too wet" the bird twittered "Too wet for me"

and joined the duck and the frog in the tree

 

Two children splashing in bare feet

With water up over their knees

"Too wet" they laughed "Too wet for me"

then they scrambled up in the tree.

 

The children, the duck, the frog and the bird

Soon shivered with cold in the tree

"Too wet" they grumbled "Too wet for me"

so--- I’m going home--- to eat my tea.

 

 

© Copyright jen-JG 2006

 

 

Author's Note

for the littlies

Reviews

[Ari]

This is pretty cute. I would check the verb tenses in the first stanza, but I really enjoyed this.

[A.J. Smith]

Oh my goodness, Jen...this just needs to be matched with wonderful illustrations and you'll have a worlwide best-selling children's book. What whimsical enchantment!

[Kara Emily Krantz]

this is adorable, lol. i really really liked this - probably the first "childrens" like poem that really caught me. i adored the frog the best, so it was fun that you started with him. :)

the only thing that sat "off" for me was the ending line - when you use "my" - the use of the "I" seemed off, since it was a group. Now that I'm looking at it again I'm thinking maybe:

"so--- we're going home--- for a cup of tea."

that way, it's like this adorable image of not only the children (but perhaps the animals, if your imagination wants to have fun) all going for a cup of tea. also, the addition of "a cup of" makes the length of the lines more in flow with the rest of the poem.

of course, you can ignore this.... hehe... just some thoughts. I only rambled on so much because i really adored this :)

hugs

[Ady]

I read this to my kids. We loved it!

[Alexander W. Quinn]

Adorable and a fun read. This is a great little pick-me up, especially on rainy days. :)

[Nicholas Hallows]

... and for the big littlies as well. Another fun read. NH

[Nick Erickson]

An excellent poem, one that could go strait to a children's book and be enjoyed by many children.
You did a very good job and have a definate talent.
Well done!!

[Tania Leigh]

jen...you have an incredible talent for this genre....I love this. This for sure belongs on bookstore shelves everywhere....I say that most sincerely. Excellent -- I smiled all the way through it :-)

[thecoolone52]

yeah that was a good children's poem, i really liked it!!!!!!!