Perfect Bliss!!

The great temptation and something long awaited for....................

 Perfect Bliss!!

    

One small globule

  Slipped

               Between my slightly parted lips

 Skated

               With riotous glee

                              Over my tongue

    Sliding

                between my teeth

                             moistening

          my gums.

 

My

    Errant tongue

                Flipped this joyous morsel

and

     every

          taste bud

                      quivered

                                with

                                     expectant glee.

 

This

 

           Entrancing droplet caressed

                 Each

                      and every taste bud

                           Into

                               trembling submission

then with exultation

        danced

             along my patiently waiting throat.

 

             AHHH!!!! Perfect Bliss!!!!!!

 

 

Isn’t is amazing

What a spoon of custard can do

When you haven’t eaten for a week?

 

© Copyright jen-JG 10 December 2008

Ward 1 South - Box Hill Hospital

Author's Note

As always honesty is good ....... thank you

Reviews

[Jen]

Amazing. I absolutely love this! No crits.

[Courtney]

I really liked how you played with the separation of the lines, it makes it a fun read. And then the closing lines, I like how they differ in style, but I feel that it adds to the whole of the piece.

It also seems like you had a lot of fun with word choice :D I like the word "globule"

[Tara Murasaki]

This is brilliant. Nice subtle hint of erotic, but funny, and almost expected, yet still concealed. Very good piece.