day dreaming

"just because you're with me doesn't mean you're with me"

the way you look at me gives me

chills, smiles, and even makes me nervous

you can see into me

and through me

reading my thoughts like a book

you finish the words as they leave my mouth

let's dance in the rain

let's lay on the roof

let's play in the dark under the stars

i will hold your hand and kiss your forehead

i will write love notes on your stomach using just my finger

i will whisper sweet surrenders in your ear

you can fall asleep in my arms

knowing you are never alone

feeling your heart beat next to mine

hearing your soul singing the same song

watching you fall into recipricated feelings

being with you

ah....

it leaves me breathless

please say you won't go

just stay with me

i promise i can dream you into my life

 

Reviews

[Vatsayayana]

This is stunning.
There's passion. Love. Want. Desire.
The dream of having, being complete.
Don't go you say, say you won't go.
Don't we all wish of this, dream of this?
While your imagery brings a smile upon my lips, I can taste the hint of wonder. Of panic.
What if they don't? Will they? Can I?
But ahhh... tis such a wild ride that of love. Beautifully descriptive.
Your simplicity gives it such power.
Brava!

[MrJodie]

Such simple, heartfelt passionate acts put into desperate perspective with that final plea "I promise I can dream you into my life..." As though your will alone would be enough. It's a terrific piece. Full of character, rich with subtle meanings (tracing love notes on your lover's stomach... that's so evocative) and yet simple enough to be sincere and in the moment. I'm very impressed.

[Angel's Lady]

Wow. This is really very amazingly beautiful...it flows so fluently, like liquid. Very eloquent. What a lucky girl to be breathed into life, just for you...Great write. I love it and I am going to put it in My Favorites, where it definitely belongs...