smoking guns.

smoking guns.

A Poem by jenniewren (J.W. Bouwman)

snickersnack
the guillotine closes
and another moment
of ishoudhaveknownbetter
has arrived -
i was never
quite
the person you wanted

but then i don't think
she ever really was
either

© 2018 jenniewren (J.W. Bouwman)


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Sorry, but it seems pointlessly puerile to me, and the guillotine does more than close. I just think there must be a better way of saying we were not right for each other.

Posted 2 Years Ago


nice switcheroo in the end.

I liked 'another moment
of ishoudhaveknownbetter'

putting it all as one word says alot

Posted 3 Years Ago


I guess it all depends on what he was really looking for in the first place. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


snickersnack

So you.
always memorable

the flame is real.
I feel it's warmth.

I tend not cocern
myself with what what
anyone expects
I know have good reason
and deserve to feel good
in the skin ive worked hard
to grow into
at least there's the regular
sex.

lately

I've
eaten
my fair share
(and then some)
Of tran wreck. 😜










Posted 4 Years Ago


...you are masterful to read...you must know!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Wise ending to the poem. Some people are never content and they get what they deserve. Thank you Jennie for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


The last stanza really packs a punch. There is so much to be said about what has gone unsaid between the lines. Heartbreaking artistry. Makes me hope to see a smile again soon.

Posted 5 Years Ago


i like what the last three lines pose...

and that guillotine idea...sometimes our love becomes a severed head...

Posted 5 Years Ago



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jenniewren (J.W. Bouwman)
jenniewren (J.W. Bouwman)

Vancouver, BC, Canada



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Playful and eager to explore new styles of writing, and to hone my skills. i'm reaching a point now where i can write a poem and be able to say that it is something i really like. I'm an avid reader, .. more..

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