Beauty's Beast

It scares me

It guards the gate and 

tells tales of the wonders beyond

Makes me dream of hues of yellow and blue

Makes me crave their warmth on my back 

and see them dance in the clouds

Life would be a summer breeze

Danger an adventure

These shackles would no longer bind

and

I would no longer be frightened by what is only me

...I should stop hiding

Give her the key 

She'll break the chains

And we'll animate a world that truely sees

the beast I set free

Author's Note

here beauty is a beast but afraid of how beastly beauty can be but craves it... just messin around with some ideas...tell me what you think ;)
theres always room for change. i wrote this today <3

Reviews

[Ashwin Shanker]

This poem has the potential to be something great. The IDEA is a great one. But, I feel if you can elaborate the idea a bit more. What would the beauty do or would be capable of doing if set free?
How would a female beast be different from the male one?
If there is some light thrown to these points... on these lines... then we are off to something huge.
Good luck,

[Jenny]

I'm not sure how a male beast would differ from a female one. Should I address that? It's about her. If the beast was a male I wouldn't think about what it would be like for a female..

When I came up with this I was thinking about editing Beauty and the Beast, the poem that I wrote in high school. But rather than editing it I felt like writing a different one. I'm thinking about writing a bit of a Beauty and the Beast series...The whole idea came from a "disney princess" series that I wrote in high school (a series of short stories and poems).

[Ashwin Shanker]

Yes, try thinking about how different it would be, it would be challenge for you I am sure; so unleash your creativity :)

[G. B. Banks]

a beautiful write. the words are formulated with perfection. loved it

[Jenny]

thanks for reading it! Im glad you like it

[Chris]

"I nor(?) longer..."I liked the reaching this presents and the tone of the voice.

[Jenny]

sorry it should say "no longer"

[genocide]

very good poem it conveys a beast wanting to make the world in there image I need a favor can you read and review genocide meets alice please

[Jenny]

i already did sunshine
it was wonderful reading it :D thank you for sharing and reading mine as well

[Michael (Letters and Li..]

Wow. That was a brilliant piece of writing. Really exceptional. Everything was perfect. The flow, the rhythm, the tone and word choice. It all fit the subject so beautifully,

[Jenny]

Thank you so much! I can never tell if I'm saying what I'm thinking.