a magical world turned into a gray world!!!

it's a magical place where there are fairys and lepercons and also unicorns , and swarfs , tell me what you think about my poem

A magical world turned into a gray world!!!!

 

I was walking along the road one day,

I see a very beautiful place,

It has so many colors, trees, and waters,

As I walk further I see a unicorn,

I have found a magical world,

A magical world of unicorns, fairy’s, and leper cons,

I have found my wonderful dream world,

As I walk further I see a baby deer,

It was a wonderful site,

So I walk further,

I see more and more wonderful sites,

Out pops a dwarf,

I jumped because it freaked me out,

As I walked further,

Things started changing,

It started going gray,

Ii couldn’t see,

 It started getting fogy,

I jump because I get scared,

I see a shadow,

I yell,” hello, hello, hello, anybody there,”

No one answered,

So I kept on going,

A huge figure pop’s out,

It looked like a ware wolf,

Then I heard howling,

I got scared,

I said,” help, help, help me,

Anybody there?”

I started to run,

It sounded like it was coming closer,

I wanted to get out of there,

I yells “hello, hello anybody out there,

Please help me,”

Then all of a sudden out pop’s a beautiful winged figure,

She was a girl, a fairy as that,

But she was different,

She was huge, and beautiful,

She was purple, and white,

She had long hair,

And bright eyes also long wings,

She saved me,

She yelled “go, go now,

Never come back here again,

You’re not welcome here,

And the day was gone,

Good night.

The end,

By: Jennifer little

 

Author's Note

i love this poem of mine its awsome tell me what you think

Reviews

[MandaBear]

Very good

[Baby Girl Rock]

Very good imagery! Really love it!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Hmmmm... yes it certainly sends a message that life can turn on a dime from good to bad and vice versa. It also could say that we won't fit in everywhere we go.

[Coyote Poetry]

Good to be able to escape to another place and world. I like the journey you took me with your words. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote