deep Blue Sky!!

well this is a poem i wrote back in 2009... just hope you like it.,....

Deep Blue sky,

As I look up at the sky I see a beautiful blue sky.

I see a bird fly by.

I look down at the ground.

I see green grass, and thank God for all the beautiful things.

I look back up at the sky and listen to the birds chirp.

I see the pretty clouds go by.

Oh what a Joy.

The End,

BY:Jennifer Little

Reviews

[Ashley Rivers :)]

I thank God for such beautiful simple things such as the deep blue sky :)
Excellent job!

[~Lizzy♬]

Very beautiful! :)

~Lizzy~

[Pencrafter]

You did very well. The simple, straightforward lyrics portray colorful images and pleasing emotions. You could possibly eliminate the first 'sky' in the first line and move the cloud reference up one line and the bird sounds down one line.
Or not. I like it.

[Laura Storm]

It feels peaceful and calm. It's a great description of the beauty of the world.

[olla]

it was a good beginning.. I still have my first poem.. we should always cherish our beginnings..

[AK]

Awesome write! Great imagery! Loved it!

[misscb]

So insightful... Loved that you made it personal to you... Short and sweet... Well done!!!

[Divinity Sleeps in This]

Nature poems are so pure somehow and I can feel the purity in this read.

[BS Johnson]

Very good. I like it. You wrote what you were feeling right then and there. To me, those are the best poems. :)

[Kenneth S.]

Simple and to the point. Not a bad write.