Sunflower

There is nothing wrong of having different perspective from others.

 

Sunflowers’ movements are synchronize,

They move and face the sun upwards;

They close and rest when the sun is away,

They will bloom again in the morning day.

 

I wonder if one sunflower do not cooperate,

Will there be still synchronicity; will others feel betrayed?

What if the one sunflower no longer wants to be part of the group?

What if being away from others makes it feel good?

 

Is it a sin to have a different perspective from others?

Not cooperating is not a bad thing,

It is one sign that you are done faking.

Faking to others that you’re in the same root--growing;

 

A sunflower has a choice to close during daytime,

And a choice to bloom during night time;

It is a way of fighting its right to live independently.

In this life that is full of uncertainty.

Author's Note

open for criticisms :)

Reviews

[brokenwriter]

wow this is just beautiful....

[Celestial]

Thank you brokenwriter😊

[Onlyme]

Lovely poem. That really expresses an interesting topic. Nicely done. And Makes you ponder and think. And nothing at all wrong with not wanting to follow the crowds.

[Celestial]

Thank you Dawn for your words. Greatly appreciated:)

[Flowers of Eternity]

Your writing is beautiful!!!
And I really enjoyed reading your poem.
I like the way you compare us and a sunflower and the lesson you gave us as well!
Well done and thank you for sharing!!

[barleygirl]

This is a very imaginative storyline, making your poem an allegory with a lesson. The way you show the sunflower as being out of synch is delightful, since nobody wants to have to be forced into such a pattern. Good details on how the sunflower can be free-thinking, suggesting that we humans can be too! Your storytelling is strong, but your word crafting could be stronger. Take line 2: "They move and face the sun" . . . a simply-stated line like this can be more embellished by choosing dynamic or playful words . . . Example: "Their smiles follow the sun's arc" . . . or "Watch them bob & tilt toward the sun" . . . NOT that I'm saying to change this poem, which is well-done. I'm just giving an example for how you can pump up your writing in the future (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Celestial]

Woow. Thank you so much Margie for that wonderful suggestions. I assure you that i will apply those to my upcoming writings. Thank you 😊