Just a Wish

Have you ever thought to yourself,

How great life would be.

If everything you asked for,

Was granted immediately?

 

Have you ever sat and queried,

The path your life would take,

If only in the past,

A certain decision, you didn't make?

 

Have you ever been so happy,

That the future could bring no fear?

Have you ever been so elated,

That the past would remain there?

 

Have you ever been so damaged,

The sores can ne'er heal?

Have you ever been so beaten, 

The pain, though then, you still feel?

 

Have you that certain someone,

Who makes your nights like days?

Who takes those heavy burdens,

And casts them by the ways?

 

Have you a special someone,

Who cant leave your side?

Who dedicates their existence,

To making 'everything right'?

 

Now I question nothing,

Yes, now I ask no more.

For what's fair, and whats not,

Has clearly gone out the door!

 

Live to do good!

Live to do bad!!

Still both are dealt the same?

When though the one that does the good,

Like the bad, he shares the pain?

 

Live to love!

Love to live?

Any reason to support this charge?

When the one who instructs you on this,

Never alerts you of the scars?

 

So lets make a wish,

Just a wish,

One I hope one day will be true,

That these events may never happen,

That this person never be you.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Here's my wish for you

Reviews

[Jason Henry]

This is kinda different from your usual stuff, but change can be good as in this case. I really enjoyed this almost forgotten format of writing. It can really bring out complex emotions in a simple way, but you will be forced to think. This poem for me is busy with themes that fall on a central tenet. Sadly the wish is too late for me cause all of that has happened lol. Great read and write.

[luke312]

good job

[DannyLynne Riley]

omg...this piece steals my breath...it is brilliant and beautiful. with depth and nice flow

[BlessedLove]

For some reason I keep reading this poem...
Raw emotion brought forth in a very creative way, as pointed out by everyone else.
Great write.
Allows persons to gain different interpretations when they choose to focus on various phrases of it.
Gets you thinking.
God bless.

[THE LOST ROSE]

All I can say if this piece is a spoken word piece you would rip the room apart with this raw but passionate portrait of a person. I think the other reviews you had are dead on when this is read aloud it is amazing. Great write.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Oh such raw passion, pain and sadness outpours. Brilliant portrait of unrequitted but rejected love possibly. The rhyme, rhythm and flow was really spot on for me when read aloud. That you should not wish these feelings on another is a great gesture as those emotions would be fierce.. have known them once or twice in my younger days. Such flare to write ... with drama in living life and loving.. may you find the love of a lifetime and beyond.

[deeps]

Such emotion in this and pain,
very well expressed, Great rhyming meter.
I liked reading this.