Overwhelming Me

This poem communicates the feelings I, and anyone else, may have while struggling with depression.

Rain, falling from the sky, Everything must die.

There is nothing left of me.

Pain, that comes from deep within. Here it come again.

It comes again to torture me.

All that’s left inside, has shriveled up and died.

There is no more hope for me.

 

Pain, so much pain and dread, living in my head.

It is overwhelming me.

 

Wait! I see a glimpse of hope. Maybe I can cope.

Perhaps all of this pain within is gone.

 

Perhaps I’ll rise again, and I can just pretend,

Pretend like everything’s ok.

 

But here it comes again, this pain from deep within.

It comes again to torture me…

Reviews

[B. Hudson]

I am not always the biggest fan of poems that are focused on pain, but the way you grasp meanings and rhyme is great. I really enjoyed reading this, especially the part of hope.

[Caleb]

Great job! Keep up the work.

[xbxbzdvdsv]

I like it, good job!! keep it up.

[Laura Lynn]

That is exactly how I feel when I have a sore throat or a bad cold as well, I just want to sleep and dream and cut the pain out

[Cool Girl]

I can relate to this. I feel sad sometimes, it's...hard. I love your poem! Nice emotions:)

[Emily]

I like the first line, I thought it seemed deep at the 'Everything must die' part, but I still liked it!
Keep it up!

[Lizardo]

I can relate to this one when I was in depression it truely is an awful feeling and you managed to capture that in the poem.
Great writing!

[R Smith]

a true appreciation of depression which can also be the writer's bane, i feel we suffer as much from depression as anyone else which is why we make such great poetry like yours York :)