Bottom of the Ocean (a poem)

Bottom of the Ocean (a poem)

A Poem by Joshua Donahue
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a poem of love at the bottom of the ocean

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Bottom of the Ocean (a poem)

 


We sink down through watery depths of the ocean

Sinking slowly with no intended motion

We sink down as the bubbles float up

Ah….your beauty---I can’t get enough

 

Your dark brown hair flowing in the water

Your eyes glistening like no other

We speak no words…

No breathing….

 

The schools of fish zooming by

The seaweed waving as if to say “hi”

The water rippling above with the light

As if both are in an epic fight

 

Pop…pop…pop goes the bubbles

Forgetting all of our troubles

But I don’t care because all I see is you

And that’s enough for me too…

 

We hit the bottom and the sand puffs up

But all we feel is love

Is that enough?

My heart aches at the sweet tenderness of your smooth face

A memory that is hard to erase

I caress you like a pearl…a sweet, shiny pearl

Allow of our emotions to unfurl

 

I promise to give you love and pure devotion

As long as your promise to stay with me here…at the bottom of the ocean


© 2011 Joshua Donahue



Author's Note

Joshua Donahue
It may not have an idolized form or anything because I didn't really care about that. I just wanted to express the feelings of love and the beauty of it. Tell me what ya think!

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This is really cute, I like this a lot. Funny thing, I've lately been thinking of a poem about being under the ocean (or some water perhaps), so when I saw this I was tickled. I love the ocean, and you do it justice here, with the extra weave, well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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0.0. I am amazed! Wonderful!! I personally love the ocean and can stare at it for hours just thinking or listing to music(or more often then none, both).

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is really cute, I like this a lot. Funny thing, I've lately been thinking of a poem about being under the ocean (or some water perhaps), so when I saw this I was tickled. I love the ocean, and you do it justice here, with the extra weave, well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cute piece.. beautiful too. :)
I really liked the flow, but think that perhaps the word choice could be broadened up a bit. Overall, great job.

-Coral

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The image of sinking into the ocean is haunting, yet beautiful. I get a feeling of peace in your poem, sinking silently, yet when I think of sinking into the water I feel death nearby. I think I am seeing something you did not intend, but you have created an amazing image in my mind. Love your poem!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

wow this is beautiful and the subject is something that I truly feel connected with through spirit.

The picture you painted was amazing and it was also delightful to my soul.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Oh this is nice!! It's so fun and cool sounding it's like you can see pictures, blue green and light at the bottom of a shallow sea! Nice imagery, oh...it's great all around.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I think this was cool but the rhythm was good even though i like poems when theres no rhyme better this one was good though compared to the other rhyming poems other people write actually

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

loved it great job keep up the great work

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

It's lovely. Really, I'm usually more prone to unrhyming poems, but I absolutely loved this. The last two stanzas are brilliant. Keep up the good work. Can't wait to read more.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Omg I read this and it was great. This is like proffessional! XD

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: poem, love, water, bubbles, bottom, of, the, ocean, fish, seaweed, light, sand, caress, romance

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Joshua Donahue

Jefferson, SC



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