Blank Wall (a poem)

a poem of heartbreak (male or female) and the loneliness that is left behind when your only best friend is your blank wall.

Blank Wall (a poem)

 

This blank wall whispers to me

He tells me what will never be

How we both lost our ‘you and me’

And there’s nothing left to see

Just this blank wall

 

The silence looms above

Asking myself “was I not enough?”

“Or was it just fool’s love?”

It’s just too much

For me and my blank wall

 

The pictures, all ripped to bits across my floor

They were lovely memories, but now no more

They use to hang on my wall until they got tore

Now it’s just me and my blank wall

 

I stare at my phone, expecting you to call

But you won’t, It’s just me and my blank wall

He’ll be there when I fall

Just me and my blank wall

 

He sits there and stares at me

Begging me please

To let you go because you’re not what I need

All I need is me and my blank wall

 

So it’s just my blank wall and me again

He is apparently my only friend

Seeing as you stole my heart then

Leaving the pieces for me and my blank wall

 

But some day---one day---I hope to fill up my blank wall

With more pictures of memories from a new heart

But until then

It’s just me and my blank wall again

 

Reviews

[Gracie-San]

Even though this was sad (like heartbreak usually is), it was still very good and captured the emotions of heartbreak well. I liked how you emphasize the blank wall so well, and I also like the idea of the blank wall being your only friend.

Good write. :)

[Chris G. Vaillancourt]

A very descriptive write

[paul1991]

A very good poem, I feel exactly the same and I'm trying to write it down aswell. This is well writen and memorable

[kylie]

This was very sad, you got the emotion accross very well.
This reminds me of heartbreak, which it probably was about, and I felt sympathy for the speaker (whether that be you or not)
But as the author of this, you very well constructed something that many can relate to. Great job!

[Tim Jousma]

Good job. You caught the whole idea of heartbreak and loss quite well. I dug how you used the wall as not only a friend but as a representation of the actual relationship lost. Keep up the good work.

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

I really loved this piece. I really loved the imagery of a wall once filled with pictures of the loved one, now fully and utterly blank. Again Great piece =)

[Morning Star]

Trully a beautiful poem it was very sad and fill with emotions
I love the flow and rthym so keep-up that flow
Your writing style is truly unique
You are truly talanted don't ever stoped writing!
Brilliant write!
Wishing you Peace Love and Light...Yolie

[Love Is Dead]

This was so awesome! this is saying that the wall is kinda like the only friend you will ever have and you'll have to add more more pictures frames all kinda of stuff on it so it just wont be dull. Nice work

[chaotic katie]

i loved this peice wounderful imagry and great emotion great write keep it up.

[Kanani]

Wow, I love the emotion. I can feel the heart break. I looooove the metaphor. The last verse is my favorite, so bitter-sweet.

AND I like the free verse! I think it flows well, and it isn't boring, like some typical ruled forms are.

[Miss Coral]

Interesting piece.. to me, it felt like some parts were much stronger than others, but overall, the tone was consistent, and the piece was very well done. Nice job. c:

Coral