louder

Louder yes louder.

The music pumps through the speaker.

Louder.

I sway as the hard rock screams for me.

I scream.

Ahhhhhhhhhhhh

Louder.

I jump up and down as I hit a hard cord on my air guitar.

Louder I scream.

As I do  a stage dive into the crowd.

Yes new York city, I’m going to live forever.

Louder.

The music gets louder, I love it.

Louder.

As the audiences pulls out there lighters.

We all scream louder.

The band bows, what a performance,

Music what a drug

Reviews

[Brandon]

Very nice imagery, very well done.

[Mark Pearce]

Jodi --

Obsessing on "Louder." It's a mood. A frame of mind.

You capture it quite well actually. (And I wrote this before reading Catrinka's review.)

"pulls out there lighters." should be "pulls out their lighters."

And the last four lines, I'm wondering if you're detaching from the spirit of the piece and becoming a bit more of a narrator. Can you convey these things while still under the spell? Do those things need to be said?

I like it.

[Catrinka]

Actually, I think this captures your experience of the scene quite well. Even though I am a grandma, I've been to my share of rock concerts and it is just a simple, hard-driving, almost drug-like experience.
I want to encourage you to keep writing because the more we write, the easier it becomes to express what is inside. Keep on rockin' girl!

[Red_Queen]

Nope sorry i usually give good reviews but as with a couple of other poems today this one was just not my cup of tea. It was just to bland for me. I don't really like a piece of writing to give evrything away. I want to sit back after reading and say to my self "what the f**k does that mean?"
Most poems just leave me saying "hmmmm?" though.
And well this one left me saying "ungggh"
Sorry to be a bummer.

[Chad Wesley Allbrett]

Thank you for taking me there with you, I've been at that place, and you captured it well!