Susie

Susie

Shivering snowflakes dance

along the cotton drizzled hills

of dormant nature.

The winds whisper

ever so slightly

all of its secrets.

a little girl

in pink striped pajamas

awakens

in excitement

ignited by

an unknown fossil fuel

it’s her birthday today

The small child jumps playfully

on her still sleeping parents

who reluctantly

wake up

after minutes of

energetic tugs and pushes.

Susie is seven today

and everyone will know it.

She is taken to the toy store

where she picks

out all the toys

she would like

as she cheerfully runs

down each aisle

singing and jumping

like a songbird midflight

on a sunny morning

in July

not a care in the world

because today

Susie is seven today

and everyone will know it.

Susie gratefully thanks her parents

after every

slight head nod

in approval of

what she can buy.

after the toy trip

of her dreams

Susie is taken out

to a restaurant

where she eats

all her favorite foods

and

she begins to feel

a heavy burden

upon her heart,

she’s starting to

become sleepy

on her birthday.

Susie is than presented

a cake as

the waiters

and waitresses

around her sing

happy birthday

as a smile

on her face appears

and a heart

inside her body

begins to brighten

up with enough illumination

to light

three whole cities

simultaneously

because today

Susie is seven,

and everyone will know it.

Susie is now in

her pink striped pajamas

in her bed

she kisses her mother

and father

goodnight,

followed by

the most heartfelt

“I love you”

one soul

could ever

fathom…

She then awakes

in a cold dreary room

cramped with sorrows

as the brisk winds

send her shivering

under the rugged covers,

today

Susie is seven

and at the Waterdale orphanage

nobody will know it.

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Reviews

[Samantha Tamburello]

Oh my goodness how I love this poem! It's so weird how I had this eerie sense of foreshadowing throughout the whole thing, yet was still shocked at the end! It's such a gem!

[Anuradha Verma]

W.o.w. Brilliant! The surprise ending is chilling (in a good way). :)

[Joe Gibson]

I really appreciate it, i was going for something happy yet stunning at the end

[Ragini]

This is just amazing. The ending gave me goosebumps. Wow, just, wow! Really amazing. :)

[Joe Gibson]

thanks so much, i appreciate it!

[Dillon "Gerald" Steele]

This gives me chills every time i read it

[Joe Gibson]

Thanks Playa