free will

free will

A Poem by light years in love
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07/2014

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The balances were spinning

Out of control

Causing the gravity of life

To press my better judgment

 

The days weighed

Without ceasing

 

Bending my spine

To touch the thirsty ground

And snapping the cartilage

Of a better tomorrow

 

 

It was there

My life fragmentized

 

Cut down into the singularity

Of a drastic thought

 

I drank the blood

Of those who kill

 

 

Opening my mind to bliss

I died, I stood ashamed

In the eyes of heaven

As it bore naked

 

The darkest holes

The deepest of rifts

 

Not leaving me empty

But cleansing me with redemption

And restoring the tenderness of my youth,

Whispering with a love that shook me

 

 

This is only

A sequel

 

Through life

Your theme is written

 

The story

Is up to you

 

 


© 2014 light years in love



Author's Note

light years in love
For when ye were the servants of sin, ye were free from righteousness. What fruit had ye then in those things whereof ye are now ashamed? For the end of those things is death. But now being made free from sin, and become servants to God, ye have your fruit unto holiness, and the end everlasting life. - Romans 6:20-22

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Powerful use of words and description.
"Opening my mind to bliss
I died, I stood ashamed
In the eyes of heaven
As it bore naked"
The above lines. Strong statement, i could write a epic poem from. Thank you Joshua for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote



Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Powerful use of words and description.
"Opening my mind to bliss
I died, I stood ashamed
In the eyes of heaven
As it bore naked"
The above lines. Strong statement, i could write a epic poem from. Thank you Joshua for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote



Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the closing lines bro... really!! The theme is written,the story is upto you.Yes we are not saved by our good works but by his grace..But after being saved also,,there is a question hanging!! Do we really go through this spiritual rebirth?? Do we pass the test.I liked the start - a balance were days overweighed. You tried but at last you gave in to the sin... the almighty redeemed you by his blood though you have drank the blood of sin.How ironical! ! How divine!! This is just so exquisite.My favourite piece of yours ;)

~Sophy

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

light years in love

3 Years Ago

Thank you. You really dug into the meaning and you found it. That means a lot.
Sophy Freebirds

3 Years Ago

:) its was a pleasure.. i liked it ..
i think there is always rebirth in life...several times...we can always get up off the mat and survive when things get their worst, and we can be better from the experience. i like "snapping the cartilage"
brittle bones from absorbing the pain of failure....but we can get better...get better movement.

jacob

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

light years in love

3 Years Ago

I agree with you. Thank you Jacob.
This poem leads to many questions void of answers: Here’s a tiny gift poem for you to ponder:

Free Will?

Kill the will,
feel the thrill

May we choose
to lose
free will?
If we can’t
do we have
it still
since we’re forced
to bear
its chill?

Paradox is our guiding light
beyond the dark, beyond the bright,
beyond the wall that blocks our sight.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

light years in love

3 Years Ago

Thank you! Paradox is our guiding light as it seems sometimes it is all we are left with. It in itse.. read more
Ok.. I couldn't resist, to not review this one on the road, whilst I see all trees passing by my double sight right now, kind of a tunnel vision, looking at my screen... But this is a magical poem, filled with the need of traveling further, than life itself, reaching the borders of death's realm, I see blue and orange, your one leg and half body, entering the orange part, inferno intesamente... Quasi entrai... Ma sei, forte, il pensiero e forte, alzi quindi, conosci l'altro mondo... Pericoloso... Ma che bellissimo... You are the transmission. Your words are poetic gold to me...

- Elisa xx

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

light years in love

3 Years Ago

Your comment about life being unfinished in your review on the Kingdom actually inspired this one. B.. read more

3 Years Ago

Oh you mean it? wow. It is utter hell for the soul, I agree. Hai ragione, quando dici questo. Che be.. read more
First, I love the font xD it's really pretty, second I didn't know there was going to be a song and it made me jump a little bit lol Anyway, I like the message within this...we have a choice in how we live our life, and even if we had a horrible past, we can have a brighter future, all we have to do is choose our path wisely.

Good Job

Posted 3 Years Ago


~*~Peace Keeper~*~

3 Years Ago

lol oh yeah well that makes since, but I think that sometimes songs can distract the reader from the.. read more
light years in love

3 Years Ago

I think the same. It either adds or takes away from the poem. There isn't a happy medium. That's why.. read more
~*~Peace Keeper~*~

3 Years Ago

Yeah exactly, I like the idea of having a song that may be similar to the poem that they can play af.. read more

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