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A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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05/2015

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you don't think

I know

that you know


look deeper

and you will find

the source


the reason

for my depravity

my bitter mask


drowning softly

in the black, its

grown into a monster


that I fight daily

at the drop of a hat

the reflection of a thought


its been with me

since the age of five

the first time I died



© 2015 joshua deathdealer



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Powerful words and thoughts my friend.
"the reason
for my depravity
my bitter mask"
We do wear fake face and learn bitterness. I enjoyed this poem. Honest tone and direct. My favorite kind of poetry. I will return later and read some more. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Interesting poem rising different images and ways of interpretation. To me it reads like a poetical introductory to a thriller, there are elements in it which create tension. Moreover your choice of words is rather simple but well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Powerful words and thoughts my friend.
"the reason
for my depravity
my bitter mask"
We do wear fake face and learn bitterness. I enjoyed this poem. Honest tone and direct. My favorite kind of poetry. I will return later and read some more. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"You don't think I know that you know ... " Those opening lines are so enigmatic that they just draw the reader in. Then, the finale, "it's been with me since the age of five, the first time I died." Wow! The darkness is like a tide that ebbed in the beginning and flowed down to the very end ... the darkest of tears. Unfortunately, I think too many of us know; and we know that you know that we know.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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God... that last line... Not only do I know... I relate. xo Love

Posted 2 Years Ago


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Great line here,"drowning softly in the black, its grown into a monster."
You allow your readers to feel the struggle you battle.
It's dark and eerie.
Great job.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..

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